Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In the contemporary world, it is ideal for many people to alter their habits and their perspective as they become older. I am totally agree with this argument.
The most obivous reason why many individuals reshape their habits and believes once they get old is that the surrounding of them. These days, a majority of people adopt new things from other individuals. Even though, when someone obverse others habits and opinions and it's positive outcome then they tends to change their current habits to gain those benefits in their life, for example. Thus, people alter their habits and perspective, so that they can achieve more in their life.
In addition, technology is the another reason why people alter their habits and their opinions as they grow older. Nowadays, the digital technology brings multiple benefits in human life due that a growing number of people learn new habits that enhance their knowledge and boost their abilities. For instance, back in time poeple used to have habits like writing and reading books but with advancement of technology, they are learning new habits such as email writing. Therefore, it is extremely beneficial for them.
Furthermore, because of health crisis individuals are altering their habits and opinions as they get older. they used to consume high sugary drinks and food but due to obesity and other health isusses, they are changing their habits towards healty lifestyle.
To sum up, it is extremely usual for individauls to reshape their habits and opinions as they grew up. I am agree this that statment all because of their surrounding, some health problems and technical development.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by agreeing that people change habits and opinions as they age. The position is clear throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide reasons such as social influence, technology, and health, the explanations are often repetitive or lack depth. For instance, the paragraph on technology mentions 'email writing' as a new habit, which is a somewhat superficial example. To reach a higher band, you should aim to provide more nuanced arguments and more specific, well-developed examples that clearly link the aging process to the psychological or practical reasons for these changes.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear introduction and conclusion. You use basic cohesive devices like 'In addition', 'Furthermore', and 'To sum up' to signal transitions. However, the flow within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the sentence structure is fragmented ('...and it's positive outcome then they tends to change...'). Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that sentences connect more smoothly would help elevate the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors ('obivous', 'believes' instead of 'beliefs', 'healty', 'isusses', 'individauls') and some awkward collocations, such as 'it is extremely usual' or 'technical development' (where 'technological advancement' would be more appropriate). You rely on a limited range of words, often repeating 'habits' and 'opinions' frequently. To improve, focus on using more sophisticated synonyms and ensuring correct word forms, such as using 'beliefs' as a noun rather than the verb 'believes'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('they tends to change'), article usage, and preposition errors ('due that a growing number'). The sentence 'I am totally agree with this argument' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'I totally agree'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and verb tense consistency.
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