Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Change in behaviour is often become very easy for peope as they grow up. I am sgree to this statement as drugs is becoming a normal use in peoples life as well as some eating habits, which i will elaborate in upcoming paragraphs.

Starting use of drugs as a kid becoming very coman in their lif which became a hurdle to stop owing to this it will become a hurdel in their future as they do not have full concious of mind to think about their goals. To get rid of usage of drugs people do various steps like taking medicins going to some goverment built drug centers and only few of people were able to leave such stuff For example, near to vancouber downtown area there are many drug addicted people dying everyday and most of them wants to quit but they are not able to because of thear surrounding. Reduction in such drug usage might help but it takes significat efforts.

Moreover, mentaining good helth is very crucial for every living being but some individuals ignore it even when they can take over these bad eating habits but over the time thing get more risky as junk food gives bad colestrole, heart problems, obisity and many more. Obisity in someone can be a major hurdel in their day to day movement and even sometime breathing but when things are not under controle it is tough to chenge in their habits it takes lots of struggle and only few people are able to achive their goals or to get red of their bad habits.

To conclude, habits are very easy to adopt but very tough to get rid of doing some illegal activities can sometime gives benifit but it may also let them in jail. It is sujested that if someone wants to achive their opinions or change it take a step ahead in their young age and keep doing it until they dont get it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing habits and opinions, but the development is somewhat tangential. While you mention that habits are hard to change, you focus heavily on drug addiction and obesity rather than the broader concept of how opinions and habits evolve as people age. The position is clear, but the arguments are not fully explored in relation to the 'aging' aspect of the prompt. To improve, ensure that your examples directly support the idea of change over time, rather than just describing the difficulty of breaking bad habits in general.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'owing to this' and 'to get rid of usage of drugs'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition between drug addiction and the difficulty of quitting feels abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the logical flow between sentences needs to be strengthened to ensure a smoother reading experience.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors that occasionally impede clarity, such as 'peope' for people, 'coman' for common, 'mentaining' for maintaining, and 'colestrole' for cholesterol. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with collocations, such as 'taking medicins' instead of 'seeking medical treatment' or 'under controle' instead of 'out of control'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on accurate spelling and expanding your range of topic-specific vocabulary to express complex ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There is a limited range of grammatical structures, and the essay contains frequent errors in sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation. For example, 'I am sgree to this statement' is grammatically incorrect, and 'most of them wants to quit' should be 'want'. Many sentences are simple or contain errors that make them difficult to parse, such as 'Change in behaviour is often become very easy'. You should work on mastering basic sentence patterns and ensuring consistent verb tense usage before attempting more complex structures.

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