Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays , habits and opinions has important role in everyone's life because by these things people can easily judge to each other how they are old because opinions can change people life day by day. I will agree with this statement that people can easily change habits and opinions as they get older.
On the one side, in modern era it is not difficult to change ourselves because due to technology humans can easily change themselves by applying different things in their life Such as they become good person by which they can easily research on YouTube , Facebook how they became good person in their life in which they will get different different methods that can help them to improve ourselves. For example : one person they became a older, in this age they join their age group members through which they can easily changes their opinions and habits because they know about this which thing is better for them and which is not. Moreover, children became older person they will starts changes themselves because know which things they want to do good and how they can improve themselves to became a good person.
Futhermore, today people starts changes their habits and opinions when they became older since they do not change this they have to face shame from other people because different age group has different habits and opinions . for example, people do not change their opinion according to their group and some people want to get their advice for doing some thing important , at that time they give some advice to them for doing better but they give opinions as child this is not help them to feel proud themselves.
In conclusion, people can change their both habits and opinions as they get older because it is important for them to change themselves according to their age group that can help them to enhance their personality towards other people.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by agreeing that habits and opinions change with age. However, the development of ideas is limited and often unclear. For instance, the argument regarding technology and social media is somewhat tangential and lacks a clear link to the core concept of 'aging'. The examples provided, such as 'joining age group members', are vague and do not fully illustrate how or why these changes occur. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments are repetitive and lack depth, preventing the essay from reaching a higher band. To improve, you should focus on providing more specific, logical examples that directly relate to the psychological or social aspects of aging.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive feature. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the one side', 'Moreover', and 'Furthermore', they are often used mechanically or incorrectly, such as the transition into the second paragraph. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the subject 'they' is ambiguous. The flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing, which makes the overall argument difficult to follow. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring clear pronoun references would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'good person', 'change', and 'things', which restricts the precision of your argument. There are also issues with word formation and collocation, such as 'different different methods' and 'became a older'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of variety and the presence of errors in word choice mean that the range is only adequate for basic communication. To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to personal development, maturity, and social adaptation, and work on using words in their correct grammatical forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'habits and opinions has', 'children became older person they will starts'), article usage, and sentence structure. Complex sentence attempts are often faulty, leading to run-on sentences or fragmented thoughts. While simple sentences are generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the text from demonstrating a good level of control. Focusing on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically verb tenses and pluralisation, will help you improve your accuracy and allow you to attempt more complex structures with confidence.
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