Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Is it very common to a certain individual to replaced their beliefs and passion as they aged? I believed that every human may changed the way they view life later on.

In my own opinion, human probably changes their ideas as they grow older. When they were young they insist that every fiction character is real and they idolized it a lot. However, as they grow older individual realize that it is only idea of the author and the character it self is not true but the positive effect regarding them was the children who became adukt now learn different good traits that they can used in real life.

As time goes by habits may changed also due to different factor they consider. First, leisure time was lessen because more adults are busy doing working or handling business to give their family a better life. Next, their body cannot adopt to the things that they can do when they were young compare to their age as an adult. For axample, they can play hardcore basketball when they were

teenager unlike today they can still play the game they love but with some caution. Last, the food that they take would be very different nowadays such as more adults cannot eat heavy meal most of the time and their are a ton of food that you must not intake as per doctor adviced.

I believed that aging was the biggest factor to consider in individuals life changes. You must do everything moderately you can anjoy life till the end.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by agreeing that habits and opinions change with age. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you provide examples regarding childhood beliefs and physical limitations, the explanation of why these changes occur is often repetitive or lacks depth. For instance, the transition from childhood imagination to adult reality is a good point, but it is not fully explored. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a clear, distinct reason and supports it with more detailed analysis rather than just listing examples. The position is clear, but the overall argument could be more sophisticated to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'However', 'First', 'Next', and 'Last'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'Last, the food that they take...'. Additionally, there are instances where the logical flow between sentences is slightly disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition from fictional characters to adult traits feels abrupt. Improving the use of linking phrases and ensuring that each sentence flows logically from the previous one will enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'good', 'real', and 'changes'. There are also several word-choice errors, such as 'adukt' (spelling), 'hardcore basketball' (informal collocation), and 'intake' used as a verb in a way that sounds unnatural. To improve, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including less common lexical items and more precise collocations. For example, instead of saying 'human probably changes their ideas', you could use 'individuals often undergo shifts in their perspectives'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'human probably changes', 'habits may changed'), tense inconsistency (e.g., 'they can play... when they were teenager'), and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'doctor adviced'). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly tense consistency and subject-verb agreement, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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