Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I agree with this statement

In this scenario its basically fits upon me in past when I was in senior secondary school I used to had some habits like going to gym ,playing outdoors games and good in reading books when I was had limited resources ,and used to enjoy with a lot of friends in that time and eat healthy . usually learn new skills from school or from games and my decisions was taken with family like for studies or anything and I was had a good routine in past decades years ,

Afterward in nowadays after completing my graduation in business streams my view of point has totally changed , I am now go alone where I want to go , and business studies they usually taught you to be independent in your life take decision fast paced and everything its be upon you at the last ,so my view of point have take new turn in life ,

Moreover in upcoming years when I am going to open my firm

then I am the one who will be going to operate whole management and staff and outings in cafes or clubs will be decreased and therefore at the end when I will getting married my lifestyles my habits and my opinion will more changed because I have to see my family first.

Hence ages are the major factor in persons life in changes of their behaviour ,their habits and decision making process moreover if they live far from their families this can important factor in their life to changes because they live independent they will get more struggles and hustles which will change their mindset in upcoming years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by agreeing with the statement and providing personal examples to support the position. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. While you mention the transition from student life to professional life, the explanation of why opinions change remains superficial. To improve, you should expand on the underlying reasons for these shifts—such as increased responsibility, exposure to new environments, or changing priorities—rather than just listing lifestyle changes. The conclusion attempts to summarize the main point, but the overall argument lacks the depth required for a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and run-on sentences. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'Hence', but they are often applied mechanically or incorrectly. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. For example, the shift from discussing your past habits to your future business plans lacks a smooth connection. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and often repetitive. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'its basically fits upon me' instead of 'this applies to me', and 'view of point' instead of 'point of view'. You rely on simple, everyday language, which limits your ability to express complex ideas precisely. To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to personal development, maturity, and lifestyle changes, and pay closer attention to standard English collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with verb tenses (e.g., 'I was had a good routine'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on, lacking proper punctuation, which makes them difficult to parse. While you attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. Focusing on mastering basic sentence construction—ensuring each sentence has a clear subject and verb—before attempting more complex structures will help you reduce the frequency of these errors.

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