Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
IT IS OFTEN ARGUED THAT PEOPLE USUALLY CHANGE THEIR OPINIONS AS TIME AND THEIR AGE EVOLVES .THERE CAN BE SEVERAL REASONS BEHIND THIS , TO COMMENCE WITH ONE OF THE MAJOR REASONS IS PRIORITIES OF PEOPLE CHANGES AS THEY GROW . TO EXEMPLIFY A 20 YEAR OLD BOY WILL PREFER TO BUY CAR WITH $ 30000 IN HIS POCKET ON THE OTHER HAND , A 45 YEAR OLD MARRIED GUY WILL IRREFUTABLY INVEST OR SAVE TH
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the required 250-word minimum, containing only 76 words. Because the essay is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, the task is not fully addressed. The ideas presented—such as changing priorities between a 20-year-old and a 45-year-old—are relevant but remain largely undeveloped due to the lack of length. To achieve a higher band, you must complete the essay by providing a full introduction, body paragraphs with supporting evidence, and a clear conclusion. Currently, the response is too brief to demonstrate the ability to develop a position or provide sufficient supporting arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text lacks proper paragraphing and structure. While there is a basic attempt to use cohesive devices like 'to commence with' and 'on the other hand', the overall progression is interrupted because the response is incomplete. The lack of a clear introduction and conclusion makes the logical flow difficult to follow. To improve, ensure you structure your essay into at least four paragraphs: an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Use linking words more naturally to connect your ideas rather than relying on mechanical transitions.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'people usually change their opinions' and 'reasons behind this' are functional but basic. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'age evolves' (age progresses) and 'buy car' (buy a car). To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including less common lexical items and more precise collocations related to the topic of personal development and maturity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors, including missing articles ('buy car'), subject-verb agreement issues ('priorities of people changes'), and awkward phrasing ('as time and their age evolves'). The sentence structures are relatively simple, and the text ends abruptly, which prevents the demonstration of a wider range of complex grammatical structures. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensure correct use of articles and plurals, and practice writing complete, complex sentences to demonstrate better control over English grammar.
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