Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is argued that the change in people’s habits and opinions occurs as they get older. In my opinion, I strongly believe that this statement is true because people are constantly expose to external stimulations and strongly affected by this.

Throughout the long period of human life, people experience numerous events and have relation with countless people. When people reads a certain book whether it is interesting for them or not, people tend to develop some kind of notion in their mind. This also happens when encountering a piece of artwork in a gallery or somewhere. People may be struck by it and have an impression on it, which leads to gaining of knowledge. Moreover, socialising with people has a similar effect. Through communications, one could develop their current idea or revise their thoughts by being expose to other people’s opinion. It is obvious that we are easily affected by others.

Human habits are highly dependant on current circumstances. Once people have an ailment, their eating habits has to be changed to a healthier one and they might have a regular exercise from then. If they change their goals for the future like going to universities, they would have to introduce themselves with a reading or studying habit. When I was in high school, I changed my aiming university from a lower level to a higher level. As a result, this made me change my studying habit to a very intense one.

In conclusion, people easily change their habits and opinion, because people think it it better to do it by instinct.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by agreeing that habits and opinions change with age. The position is clear throughout the essay. The ideas are relevant, such as the influence of social interaction and life circumstances on personal development. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the paragraph regarding habits mentions changing goals but lacks a deeper exploration of why this is a universal human experience. While the response covers all parts of the task, the supporting arguments could be more thoroughly extended to reach a higher band. The conclusion is brief and slightly repetitive, failing to fully synthesize the main points discussed in the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear central topic. There is a progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover', 'Throughout', and 'In conclusion', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions feel mechanical, and there are instances where the flow between sentences is slightly disjointed. For example, the shift from discussing books to artwork and then to socialising in the second paragraph is a bit abrupt. Referencing is generally clear, but the overall structure could benefit from more sophisticated linking words to improve the flow between ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey their meaning clearly. There is an attempt to use some less common vocabulary, such as 'external stimulations', 'notion', and 'ailment'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'have relation with' (should be 'have relationships with'), 'gaining of knowledge' (should be 'gaining knowledge'), and 'introduce themselves with a reading... habit' (should be 'develop a reading habit'). These errors do not impede communication, but they limit the precision and sophistication of the writing, keeping it within the 6.0 range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While there is an attempt at complexity, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues like 'people is constantly expose' (should be 'people are constantly exposed') and 'eating habits has to be changed' (should be 'eating habits have to be changed'). Additionally, there are errors with verb forms, such as 'people reads' and 'being expose'. Punctuation is generally functional, but the frequency of these grammatical slips prevents the essay from reaching a higher band, as they are noticeable and occur across a range of structures.

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