Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this contemporary era of rapid globalization and technological advancement, the group of folks believe that changing habits and opinions for particular believes is effortless for individuals. Although this issue triggers widespraed the debate among the masses, I strongly agree with this notion. Therefore, my agreement will be discussed in the following paragraphs with the suitable conclusion.

Supporting my agreement to the statement, I believe that changing habits and opinions by the time is essential for not only being good but mannered person. To explain this further, in the younger age, person has some bad habits like waking up late, not being time punctual, etc. it harms person growth as well as development in the near future. To illustrate, one survey conducted by The Time of India in 2024 revealed that an individual can get their desire success 40% faster in term of time by the just improving their bad habits and correcting their beliefs. Therefore, changing habits by the time can lead to a good as well as successful life.

On the other hand, despite having a plenty of merits of changing habits and opinions, many people just keeping their bad habit without improving or changing and lead to a struggle life when they get older. The first and foremost reason for that is laziness. To make it clear, people find their selves in difficult when they try to change habits and ended up by choosing that habit rather than the change. For instance, one study showed that people feel more comfortable in bad habits or keeping their older opinions rather than challenging it.

In conclusion, a person finds difficulty to change their habit and perspective as they get older; however, those who challenge their bad habit get the success in their life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position and providing reasons for the change of habits and opinions. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention that changing habits is essential for personal growth, the explanation is repetitive and lacks depth. The example provided regarding 'The Time of India' is a bit vague and does not fully support the argument in a sophisticated way. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph develops a single, clear idea with more detailed reasoning and specific, illustrative examples that directly link back to the prompt's core question about the aging process.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear introduction and conclusion. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In conclusion', 'On the other hand', and 'To illustrate'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the connection between ideas is slightly disjointed, such as in the second paragraph where the transition from 'bad habits' to the survey result feels abrupt. The use of referencing is occasionally unclear, which affects the overall progression of your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your meaning, but it is often repetitive or slightly inaccurate in terms of collocation. For example, phrases like 'struggle life' and 'manner person' are non-standard. You attempt to use some more academic vocabulary, such as 'contemporary era' and 'globalization', which is positive. However, there are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'particular believes' instead of 'particular beliefs' and 'widespraed the debate'. Improving your control over word forms and collocations will help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical errors, such as 'person has some bad habits' (missing article) and 'people find their selves in difficult' (incorrect pronoun and adjective usage). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are errors in sentence construction that occasionally impede the flow. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and ensuring that your complex sentences are grammatically sound.

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