Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Task 2

Many people are aware of what they should do to maintain a good health, dout they do not follow a healthy lifestyle why does this happen, and what can be done to encourage healthier habits?

Public hes health has become increasingly prominent concern as modern societies face a growing health burden of lifestyle-related illnesses and other preventale issues. However many individuals are or aware from the good diet but they do not follow. I will astive to discuss explain their emotion with my viewpoints which will lead to a logical conclusion.

To commence with, the primary reason why i hold this viewpoint is that masses have too much busy schedule therefore they do not have time to follow the healthier lifestyle so they choose consent very for their food which creates many hassels. Moreover, nowadays healthy diets are too expensive therefore anyone can afford it and so are several individuals can not afford diet accorating to their budget. Furthermore because fruits and nutritious foods cost more. Furthermore, it requires alot of discipline and so people regular excercise and other healthy daily routine as well as people want immediately result

therefore, they lose their sendby interest in excercise exercise and healthy food.

To the paradoxical stole, another equally to reduce cost of the fruits vegetables and nutritious food and accerale taxes so everyone can affort it and follow the healthy diet. In addition all individuals shoald prepare their mental state of and give time to themselves because their health is too much important. Sdolionally, masses should motivate themselves and pressured themselves see they can maintain their regultar excere routine as well as fit keep their physical health such as by running, walking and many more. They should to eat healthy food like fruits, vegetables and many more.

Overall, the situation can be improved through a combination of healthy diet and regular exercise supported of all individuals. so people can improve maintain their health and live a happy life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The candidate has unfortunately answered an entirely different prompt regarding healthy lifestyles and why people do not follow them, rather than the provided prompt about people changing their habits and opinions as they get older. Despite writing over the required 250 words and attempting to present ideas, the complete failure to address the core prompt regarding age-related changes in habits and opinions means the task response is severely off-topic. Under the official IELTS band descriptors, a response that fails to address the prompt cannot achieve a passing score for Task Achievement. Therefore, a band score of 3.0 is awarded.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow and progression are heavily disrupted by numerous cohesion errors and missing transitions. Phrases like 'To the paradoxical stole' and 'Overall, the situation can be improved' show an inappropriate use of cohesive devices that do not logically connect the ideas. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal organization of ideas within paragraphs is very confusing and repetitive, particularly in the body paragraphs where points about cost and discipline are jumbled together. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. This aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily impacted by spelling and word-choice errors that frequently strain the reader's comprehension. Examples such as 'preventale', 'asctive', 'consent very', 'hassels', and 'accerale taxes' demonstrate a very limited control over lexical items. While the student attempts to use less common words like 'prominent' and 'paradoxical', the inaccurate usage and severe spelling mistakes prevent the communication of precise meanings. The range is inadequate for an academic or general training task at a higher level, fitting the Band 4.0 criteria.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text contains a high frequency of basic and complex sentence errors, run-on sentences, and fragmented clauses, such as 'However many individuals are or aware from the good diet but they do not follow' and 'Furthermore because fruits and nutritious foods cost more.' Punctuation is largely neglected, with missing full stops and capital letters leading to run-on thoughts (e.g., 'therefore, they lose their sendby interest in excercise exercise and healthy food'). The range of structures is limited and marred by persistent errors that cause considerable difficulty for the reader, placing it at Band 4.0.

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