Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, it is very common for many people to change their pattern of habits as thier age increase.i am totally agree with this phenomenon and resons for this shall be disscussed in the upcoming paragraph with relevant example.
To commence with people change their opinion because they are getting older abnd learning from their expirience,this is to say that with increasing age people face mane oppotunities,difficulties and when they are young tried to solve them,whether it is positive or negative. for example some people were very poor in the childhood and became rich as the time passes,because of their commitment to the life. They value even one ruppee more can't preffer to waste money.
Moreover,older people are tend to change their habits as they get tendency to get injured due to loss of strengthening of bone and muscle.They walk slowly not run like youngers,as well as eat with patience because of most people lost their teeth and their digestive system become weak too.To cite with an example,accoding to the recent survey was published in the magazine` Lifestyle`,the people over sixty in India chnange their daily habits,and patterns due to lack of exercise and sedentary life style after retierment.
To conclude,people with increasing age thier pattern of daily activity,habits and thinking and opinion ways are changing because of loss of strength and more maturity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response presents a clear position ('i am totally agree with this phenomenon') and attempts to address both aspects of the prompt: habits and opinions. Ideas are introduced regarding life experience shaping opinions and physical decline altering habits. However, the development is limited by the overall short length, falling below the 250-word minimum at 223 words. Furthermore, some supporting examples lack full clarity or detailed explanation, resulting in an under-developed line of argument in places. To achieve a higher band, the response must meet the minimum word count and extend the explanations with more fully realized supporting details.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay has a discernible organizational structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Transitional phrases such as 'To commence with', 'Moreover', and 'To conclude' are used to signal progression. However, paragraphing is somewhat irregular, and cohesive devices are frequently mechanical or misused (e.g., 'To cite with an example, accoding to the recent survey...'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, and logical flow is hindered by abrupt transitions between sentences, such as moving from childhood poverty directly to valuing money without a smooth connective link. Overall cohesion requires better management.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for basic communication, but demonstrates noticeable limitations and frequent errors. There are multiple spelling mistakes ('thier', 'resons', 'disscussed', 'abnd', 'expirience', 'mane', 'oppotunities', 'ruppee', 'preffer', 'accoding', 'chnange', 'retierment') and incorrect word forms ('strengthening of bone' instead of 'strength'). While the student attempts less common items like 'sedentary life style' and 'commitment', inaccuracies in word choice and spelling significantly impede the lexical score and occasionally strain the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent punctuation and capitalization errors, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters ('i am totally agree') and missing spaces after punctuation marks. Sentences often run together without proper coordination or subordination, leading to grammatical slips like 'older people are tend to change', 'most people lost their teeth', and 'people with increasing age thier pattern... are changing'. Errors are frequent and often distract the reader, though they rarely completely obscure meaning.
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