Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It has been observed that, Nowadays people are going to be changed with theire age. Thinking and Mindset also flipped by the time. I firmly believe that theire routines and perspectives different as compare them younger age. The causes are elaborated further.
Discussing the reasons, the most obvious is that experiances. in theire golden age, people faced all ups and down and teach a lot thing. For instance, as per my personal experience before, i like to spend my money on expensive things but in present, my opinion is changed. The reason is i realised it is waste of money and these expensive things are not going to give me a peace. Moreover, I can invest it on share market or anywhere instead of spending a money on these unneccessary things.
Furthermore, the another reason is some physical stability. Day by day the people get older and also theire body have not respond as compare to early life. This is the main reason to change routines. For example, when people are young they like to spend time with friends, parties. Additionally, they used to go on morning wallk and some exercises. TIme changed everything therefore, they are not able to do anything in theire old age which they like to do before.
On the other hand, there are some people who are not believe it is common. people can stay stable with your age. The reason behind this is the family. family can be tricky and sticky to touch the people with theire roots.
To conclude, it can be eventually commented that people are changed with the time. As my perspective it is not bad thing to change. To add to this, all of my points are considered with some reasons.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position that people do change their habits and opinions as they get older. The writer introduces two main arguments: life experiences altering personal perspectives, and physical capabilities declining with age. While the ideas are relevant and supported by personal examples, the development remains somewhat limited and superficial. For instance, the discussion on physical stability mentions parties and morning walks, but these points are not fully extended or explored in depth. However, the writer does cover all parts of the prompt with a consistent stance throughout. These characteristics align closely with the Band 6 descriptor, where relevant ideas are presented, but some are under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay displays a logical overall arrangement with distinct paragraph breaks separating the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'On the other hand' are utilized to signal transitions between ideas. However, referencing and cohesion are sometimes faulty or mechanical. For example, phrases like 'the another reason' and 'some physical stability' feel awkward and disrupt the smooth progression of thought. Additionally, referencing pronouns like 'theire' lack clarity at times. Paragraphing is attempted appropriately, but the overall mechanical nature of cohesive ties and occasional lapses in logical progression place this response at a Band 5.5, rounded to 5.0 due to recurring cohesion issues.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to communicate basic ideas about aging and habit changes. However, there is a limited range of vocabulary, and numerous word-choice and collocation errors are present, such as 'flipped by the time', 'share market', and 'morning wallk'. Spelling errors like 'experiances', 'theire', 'unneccessary', and 'wallk' occur frequently. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they restrict the lexical score. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, but inaccurate control over word forms and collocations prevents the response from reaching higher bands. This performance fits the Band 5 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, though complex structures are frequently faulty. Examples of grammatical errors include subject-verb agreement issues ('people are not believe'), incorrect tense usage ('before, i like to spend'), and missing articles ('in present', 'on share market'). Punctuation is also problematic in places, with comma splices and incorrect capitalization ('TIme changed'). While communication is generally maintained despite these errors, the high frequency of grammatical inaccuracies means that error-free sentences are not in the majority. This profile corresponds to a Band 5 level of grammatical control.
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