Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Agree. It is true that most of human beings have different habits and opinions from their younger ages.
Eventhough, children decide to do a specific occupation which is more attractive themselves in future, they realizing that their abilities and skills are different from that while they growing up. For instance, In my childhood I had a dream to become a engineer which js most attractive job for me. But after I became my younger ages I realize that my skills are more suitable for a accounting job.
Not only that but also the people's background also change their future. In past they didn't think about the study area which they going to choose and people which they going to behave with. For example, When I am growing I have chance to make frendship with a person who had a accounting background. That encourage me to follow that feild.
Add more points to this argument, changing the habits also very common thing. when people growing their habits are changing since engage with different people who has different personality levels. For instance one of my brothers become addicted to drugs since his community is very bad.
Moreover, humans behaviors are changing because of the economical problems. when people suffering from economic problem they tend to do bad things. For example, one of my uncle became a theif since he face so many financial problems in his life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response clearly presents a position agreeing with the statement, supporting it with relevant arguments about changing career goals, personal backgrounds, and habits over time. Examples are provided from personal and second-hand experience, such as shifting ambitions from engineering to accounting and observing the negative influence of peers. However, ideas are generally under-developed and lack extension. More importantly, the response falls short of the minimum word count requirement, containing only 235 words instead of the required 250 words. This under-length issue prevents the task from being fully addressed and keeps the score at band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay displays some logical organisation, attempting to separate ideas into distinct paragraphs regarding career opinions and changing habits. However, the overall progression is weakened by abrupt transitions and short, disjointed paragraphs. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or inaccurate, such as 'Not only that but also' and 'Moreover'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and paragraphing is insufficiently developed. Overall, the arrangement is somewhat choppy and lacks smooth flow, aligning with band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with frequent basic errors in word choice and collocation. Examples include 'most of human beings', 'younger ages' instead of youth or younger years, 'accounting job' instead of accounting career or profession, and 'make frendship'. There are also spelling errors like 'Eventhough', 'realizing', 'feild', and 'theif'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic ideas, the noticeable errors and restricted range place this performance firmly at band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but many complex attempts contain significant grammatical errors. Examples of faulty structures include 'children decide to do a specific occupation which is more attractive themselves in future, they realizing that...', 'When I am growing I have chance...', and 'since engage with different people who has different personality levels.' Errors in tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, articles, and prepositions are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. This corresponds to a band 5.0 level of grammatical control.
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