Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in this world , most of humanbeing change their regular behavior and viewpoint . its normal in person life crycle becouse most of doctor confuram this theory . I agree with is startment amd i will discuss my opinoin in next paragraph.

To be begin, one of most significant reason is that age facter, in their childhoob person mental health are less mature after they maroj in society , they learn more life lesson that change their way of life. For example, one of most respectfull oraginstion in this world W.H.O researh that individual habit change every 10 year of their life beaouse they sensible more about their life experinces .

Morover, another crucial factor to consider is that finaces condition , furthermore after young life most of people think about their furutr lifwstyle . A particual good example of this is study of amrican unvierasty show us After 30 75% people change thair habits and save their money for future years that can help their retarment . One of another point of this about is grown family , without obligation human are selfish think about own goal as they result they follow same servival progress .

in conclusion, people change their life style becaus of finae condition or they got more muture they lining with family their goals are change thay think more about people how lining with them .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

For this criterion, the response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing why people change their habits and opinions as they get older, presenting a clear position agreeing with the statement. However, it only partially satisfies the requirements because the word count is 231 words, falling short of the mandatory minimum of 250 words. Furthermore, the ideas are somewhat limited and under-developed. For instance, the mention of financial conditions and family obligations in the body paragraphs is introduced but lacks sufficient expansion, relying on vague assertions rather than deeply explored arguments. To reach a higher band, the writer must expand the response to meet the full length requirement and provide fully elaborated examples and explanations for each main point.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with a recognizable introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is attempted, and transitional markers are used to sequence ideas, such as 'To be begin', 'Morover', and 'in conclusion'. However, cohesion is sometimes faulty and mechanical, with referencing that is not always clear, which detracts from the overall flow. For example, the sentence 'One of another point of this about is grown family' lacks clear cohesive ties and seamless integration into the paragraph. To improve Coherence and Cohesion to the next level, the writer needs to ensure that cohesive devices are used more naturally, referencing is precise, and the logical progression between sentences is smoother without relying on repetitive structural patterns.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The student uses a limited vocabulary range that is minimally adequate for addressing the general topic of personal change over time. There are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling throughout the essay, such as 'humanbeing', 'crycle', 'confuram', 'facter', 'maroj', 'oraginstion', 'finaces', 'furute', 'unvierasty', 'retarment', 'muture', and 'lining'. These errors cause some difficulty for the reader and impede fluent communication. To move up to a higher band, the writer must expand their lexical repertoire beyond basic, frequently misspelled terms, and demonstrate greater control over word formation, spelling, and collocations when attempting less common vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and basic clauses. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, articles, and punctuation, which can cause difficulty for the reader. Examples include 'most of humanbeing change', 'its normal in person life crycle becouse most of doctor confuram', 'in their childhoob person mental health are less mature', and 'as they result they follow same servival progress'. To achieve a higher score in grammatical range and accuracy, the writer needs to incorporate a wider variety of complex sentence forms with good control, reducing the frequency of basic structural errors and improving punctuation.

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