Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

people change their opinions and habits as they get older, it is common to change habits as growing age. In my opinion, i am quietly agree with that people change their point of view over many things and their habits.

I fairly agree, individuals change their their habits by increasing age.Younger people do not think wisely and do some awkward things. as they grow up they could learn many things and manners. Their POV changing over time due to gaining experiences. They use to daily exercise and do Yoga in daily life. many youngsters,for instanse, youngsters spend more time on social media,playing some games. Although, when the get old they have some responsibilities and join corporation job. When they get job, their habits and opinions automatically changed by their responsibilities.Consequently, they are more likely to adopt healthier and more organised routines.

Secondly, when individuals are young they more influenced by their friends,parents and virtual word heroes. As they grown old they encounter many incidents and many life experience which would change their behaviour towards the society. They become more open minded could different results and thinking process from their brain. Furthermore, younger people may be willing to take risk, although, older adults often consider the long-term consequences of their choice.

In conclusion, I strongly agree that people commonly changing their opinion and their habits as they get older. Changes in responsibilities, life experiences and priorities play a major role on shaping people's behaviour and beliefs througout their lives.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you agree that people’s habits and opinions change with age, and you give relevant reasons involving experience, responsibilities and priorities. The examples about young people spending time on social media and adults adopting more organised routines help connect the discussion to everyday life. However, the ideas are only partly developed. For instance, the claim that young people “do not think wisely” is broad and would be stronger with a specific explanation or example; the point about influence from friends and “virtual word heroes” is also not fully explored. The response is 2 words below the required minimum, so it does not meet the task’s length requirement. Develop each reason with a clearer example and explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The paragraphs generally group related ideas, and linking expressions such as “Secondly,” “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within the body paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow. The first paragraph moves from maturity to exercise, social media and employment without clearly explaining how each point connects. Some links are also awkward or repetitive, including “Although, when the get old” and the repeated use of “when they get.” Improve cohesion by organising each paragraph around one main reason, then explaining it and giving a relevant example. Use pronouns and transitions carefully so relationships between ideas remain clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “responsibilities,” “life experiences,” “long-term consequences” and “healthier and more organised routines.” These phrases show an attempt to discuss change and maturity beyond very basic terms. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning less clear. Examples include “quietly agree,” “increasing age,” “virtual word heroes” and “join corporation job.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “instanse,” “througout” and “open minded” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of expressions for describing changing beliefs and routines, and check spelling and collocations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “Although” and a clause beginning “when individuals are young.” However, errors occur frequently, and some sentences are difficult to process. For example, “as they grown old they encounter many incidents” has an incorrect verb form, while “when individuals are young they more influenced” is missing a verb. There are also problems with sentence boundaries and capitalization, as in the opening comma splice and lowercase “i” and sentence beginnings. The sentence “They become more open minded could different results” is incomplete and unclear. Practise accurate subject–verb patterns and complete clauses, then proofread punctuation and capitalization. Clearer, controlled sentences will make your ideas easier to understand.

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