Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this contemporary world it is very comman in denizens to change their habits and opinion as they are getting older which was always a debatable issie now has become more controversial.Moreover,i agree with this statement which i will discuss in upcoming paragraphs and lead to logical conclusion.

There are myraids of reason to support my argument, as masses are getting older with having alot of experience in their life while doing the assidous work to make money and butter for the betterment of the life , they learn more and get things involve how , when and where they have to alter their habits and opinions which is more indispensable in their lives to treat with other individuals and feel them comfortable whenever they get chance to meet with them.

Another pivotal point to take into consideration is,

people become more smart and experienced through facing many obstacles in life and getting alot of inspiration from it then they teach their offsprings about good and bad habits which needs to be prohibted which not though they can apply these in their lives too without any consequences and doubt. Furthermore, if denizens not change their habits and opinions may be then they face mire difficulties because when we were younger people had different habits and opinions according to age which was correct but when people get older they must have to alter their daily habits.

To recapitulate after having detailed discussion, denizens should go with flow with habits and opinions which would make them a good and smart person and their children feel proud of him.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is clear: you agree that people change their habits and opinions as they age. You give relevant reasons, including gaining experience, learning from obstacles, and teaching children. However, the response only partly develops the task. The explanation that experience helps people know “how, when and where” to alter their habits remains general, and the point about teaching offspring is not clearly connected to how adults themselves change. The conclusion repeats the view but adds little support. To strengthen the response, explain specific changes in habits and opinions and show why age or experience leads to them—for example, a personal or familiar case of someone changing their lifestyle or views.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. Some linking expressions, such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore” and “To recapitulate,” signal movement between points. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first body paragraph combines experience, earning money, changing habits and social comfort in one long sentence. The second paragraph shifts from learning from obstacles to teaching children, then to difficulties caused by not changing, without clearly showing how these ideas connect. Several transitions feel formulaic rather than logical. Use shorter units to develop one main point at a time, and make references such as “these” and “it” clearly identify the idea being discussed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of vocabulary, including “pivotal point,” “obstacles,” “indispensable” and “consequences,” and the general topic remains understandable. However, the range is not consistently controlled: several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “denizens” for people, “money and butter,” and “get things involve.” Spelling errors such as “comman,” “issie,” “myraids” and “prohibted” also make the writing less clear and reduce precision. Some expressions are repeated, particularly “habits and opinions” and “people.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than unusually formal words, and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary for particular changes—such as adopting healthier routines or revising a belief—would help express your ideas more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “while” and “because,” but complex structures are often faulty and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to interpret. For example, “as they are getting older” does not fit smoothly with the opening claim, and the long sentence beginning “as masses are getting older” lacks a clear grammatical structure. There are also problems with agreement and verb forms in “if denizens not change” and “they must have to alter.” Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, especially after full stops and around the sentence fragment “Another pivotal point to take into consideration is,”. Build accuracy with shorter complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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