Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Few people believe that it is normal for a person to switch their hobby or their idea about certain aspects as they grow older. Portion of the population agrees with the opinion wheras other half has a contradicting views about it. I totally agree with the statements that a person do change his habits and views as he grows older.

Opinions are formed inside the brain of person based on the experience he goes through in life. For instance, A young child might think that going to school is annoying while persuing education but as the time passes and he leaves the school he understands the value of education and the time he spent in school and a shift takes place in his opinion as he grows older. A sharp shift in the habits can also be seen in people with passing time, People tend to become more diet consicious and health consicious as they grow older and forms a habit to visit Gym, do cycling or running on regular basis to stay fit. Everyone do not change their habits at once, It only happens after a triggering point which can happen in sorrow as well as in happiness, In sorrow it can be a heartbreak or a loss of someone close to you. In happiness like someone new coming into your life for example, Marriage.

To conclude i would say that opionions and habits are offen assosciated with an indiviuals own understanding and requirements at that moment and are tend to change with fluctuating demands. Every opinion should be respected and appreciated. As someone grows older they get new experiences and meet fresh faces learning a lot of new stuff about life and form fresh opinions or change their existing views about something in their mind.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction: “I totally agree” that habits and views change with age, and the response addresses both parts of the question. The examples about a child’s changing view of school and adults adopting healthier routines are relevant and help explain your reasons. You also identify possible triggers, such as heartbreak or marriage. However, these points are not developed equally: the school example explains a change in opinion, while the health-habit example is asserted more generally, without a specific illustration or explanation of how age leads to the change. The conclusion repeats the main idea but adds a broad statement about respecting opinions rather than sharpening your argument. More precise explanation and support would make the response more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a body paragraph with examples, and a conclusion. Ideas generally progress from changing opinions to changing habits, and phrases such as “For instance” and “To conclude” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, the body paragraph contains several different points in one long sequence, including health routines and emotional triggers, so the relationships between them are not always clear. The opening contrast about what “a portion of the population” believes is also unnecessary when your own position is agreement. Some linking and punctuation choices make the flow mechanical or confusing. Separate the main reasons into clearer paragraphs and use references and transitions that show how each example supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including relevant terms such as “experience,” “triggering point,” and “existing views.” There are also attempts to express more specific concepts, such as becoming health-conscious and forming new opinions. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes distract the reader: “persuing,” “consicious,” “opionions,” and “assosciated” are examples. Some combinations are unnatural, including “switch their hobby or their idea” and “fresh faces learning a lot of new stuff.” Repetition of “change,” “opinion,” and “as they grow older” also limits variety. Aim for accurate collocations and more precise phrasing, while checking spelling carefully; this will make your vocabulary more effective without requiring unnecessarily complex words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a conditional example beginning “A young child might think…” and a longer sentence explaining how experience can alter opinions. This shows some range, and the main message is usually understandable. However, errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries are frequent enough to affect clarity. For example, “a person do change” should use a singular verb, and “Everyone do not change” has an agreement problem. The sentence beginning “Opinions are formed inside the brain of person” is missing an article, while several long sentences join separate ideas with commas. Use shorter, controlled sentences where needed, check subject–verb agreement and articles, and punctuate independent clauses accurately.

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