Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is often said that it is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older. I competely agree with this statements. It is very

important for young people due to nowadays many people often change habits.

To begin with, When he was young he play different games for example, football, haki, cricket and bedmintan. people he was young running fast and some different activites they keep active and physical strong and reduced stress. When he was young he do daily excersice in the park however when he will older i believe that change the habits. Many people wheIn he was young they doing hardworking and good earning our family and some time meet with friends. He is spend long time busy work and other responsbilitiey and they should want some free time spend with family and friends due to they keep reduce stress and relx.

On the other hand, When he was older it is change your opinions and thinking because when he was old he not playing some games and they do not proper daily routine activites they should stay many time at home. When they stay long time at home and feel sad then he goes to park and meet some older friends and spend time park fresh air peacefull atumosphair.

In conclusion, I believe that people to change both their habits and their opinions. I firmally agree with because habits and thinking often change people dur to it is very common for people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

Your position is clear: you say, “I competely agree,” and the response stays focused on how habits and opinions may change with age. You give relevant examples about playing sports when young, becoming busy with work and family, and spending time with older friends later in life. However, the reasons are only minimally explained, and the discussion of changing opinions is especially unclear; the essay mostly describes changes in activities and routines. The conclusion repeats your view without adding support. The response is 227 words, so it is 23 words below the 250-word minimum; the 27 words copied from the task prompt are not counted. Develop each main idea with a clearer explanation or a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “To begin with” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. These markers help the reader recognise the intended stages of the response. However, ideas within the paragraphs are difficult to follow because several points are joined without clear logical links, and references such as “he,” “they,” and “you” shift unpredictably. The second paragraph also moves from opinions to staying at home and visiting a park without explaining the connection. Use one clear topic sentence per paragraph, keep the subject consistent, and connect each example directly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “habits,” “opinions,” “stress,” “family,” and “friends,” so the general subject is usually recognisable. There are also attempts to describe activities and feelings, such as “physical strong” and “fresh air.” However, vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise, and frequent spelling errors make some phrases harder to understand, for example “competely,” “excersice,” “responsbilitiey,” and “peacefull atumosphair.” Some combinations are unnatural, such as “keep reduce stress” and “spend time park.” Build accuracy with common collocations and check spelling; for instance, use “reduce stress,” “spend time in the park,” and “stay physically active.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer sentences and uses simple linking structures such as “because,” “however,” and “when.” Nevertheless, the range of sentence forms is very limited, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction sometimes distort meaning. Examples include “he play different games,” “he do daily excersice,” and “when he was older it is change your opinions.” Pronouns and tense also shift within sentences, making it unclear who is acting and when. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one subordinate clause. Keep the subject and tense consistent, for example: “When people are young, they often play sports, but they may exercise less as they get older.”

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