Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

change is an integral part of a healthy lifestyle , regardless of your age. It is very frequent for everyone to maniuplate both thier routines and thier views as days passed or after certain age . I totally agree with this quote and in the upcoming paragraph I will explain the reasons behind it with my experiences.

one of the major cause of this change is maturity. everyday we learn something new from friends and strangers. At certain age , people accepts the fact of understanding other feelings such as care in a relationship. for instance, before marriage , mostly not always but males are unorganised and has a life to live on his own but having a partner and childrens , his level of thinking is quite different , consequently has a lot of responsibilities and acceptance of love which leads to a healthy family life and burden , however an accountability of taking care of a family.

secondly , an education plays a vital role in a change of a personal behaviour . In this world we can definately tell that whats the difference between a teenager and a college graduate . once a child graduated from the college and having a practical knowledge about a cut- throat world has an idea where to work more and get a work- life balanced life , unlike boys discussing about a car models and a video . Moreover its not thier problem it is an early age disadvantage with a lack of enough vocational training.

According to my thoughts of trail, after having an experince about the current world and trained on practical things , people are easily going to change thier habits and opinions.

In conclusion , after spending a certain age on the heavenly earth with a life testing human beings , will have a better idea to change our vision and re

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that people change their habits and opinions as they grow older, and you give two relevant reasons—maturity and education. The example of taking on family responsibilities helps illustrate how priorities can change, while the contrast between teenagers and graduates supports your point about education. However, some ideas are less fully explained than others. The education paragraph focuses mainly on work and interests, so its connection to changing opinions could be made clearer. The final paragraph and conclusion are also incomplete, leaving your overall argument without a fully developed ending. Explain more precisely how each example demonstrates changes in both habits and opinions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a concluding section. Sequencing phrases such as “one of the major cause” and “secondly” signal the main points, and the examples generally follow the ideas they are meant to support. However, progression is uneven: the final paragraph repeats the claim about experience without adding a distinct point, and the conclusion stops mid-thought. Some links within sentences are difficult to follow, particularly the long example about marriage and family responsibilities. Use clearer topic sentences, divide complex explanations into shorter units, and ensure each paragraph develops one point before moving to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “maturity,” “responsibilities,” “practical knowledge” and “work-life balance.” These choices show an effort to discuss personal development and adult life. However, the range is limited by repeated general terms such as “change,” “life” and “age,” while several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, including “maniuplate” routines, “life testing human beings” and “a life to live on his own.” Spelling errors such as “thier,” “definately” and “experince” also reduce precision. Build a more accurate range for describing changing priorities and viewpoints, and check spelling and natural word combinations during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including cause-and-effect structures with “which leads to” and “consequently.” However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “people accepts” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “males are unorganised and has” shifts incorrectly between plural and singular forms. There are also problems with articles, plurals and sentence boundaries, as in “an education” and the long sentence beginning “for instance, before marriage.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent. Practise checking agreement and sentence boundaries, and split long sentences so each clause has a clear subject and verb.

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