Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

People grow older they have many life experiance so they should develop their habits in healthy. It is not neccessory to all people change their habbits but some people have many expriance to their life and thats way to change their opinions.

I have some example for this. My grandma is today 72 year old but she is very fit and healthy. Beacause when she did turn 40 before she run a bussines. She meet very people as a costomer and meeting to outstation. In that time she get many good and bad experiance but she got not a nervous. She lern to all this and her mind and opinions slowly slowly change. And she decide to at 40 a good habit change the mind and body also. So she started go to gym and exercise regularly. Today she 72 but she is very confident and her not a depend to others. In short this example to say this people opinions are change because of their personal experiances and increased knowledge.

I am saw this to my home example is in my house so i agree to that

people commonly change their habbits and oppinions as they grow older this is mainly because their experinces, knowldge and responsibility devlop over time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a relevant position: you agree that people commonly change their habits and opinions as they grow older, and the example of your grandmother connects life experience with changes in outlook and exercise habits. However, the response addresses the task only partially because the explanation is brief and the example is not fully developed. The opening also says that not everyone needs to change, which makes your position less clear before you state your agreement at the end. The response is 39 words below the required minimum, so there is limited space to explain your reasons. Develop both habits and opinions more explicitly, and add a specific example showing how age or responsibility led to a change.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall shape: an opening statement, a paragraph about your grandmother, and a concluding statement of agreement. The example gives the response a central focus, and phrases such as “In short” signal a summary. However, progression is difficult to follow in places because ideas are repeated or joined without clear links. For instance, the final paragraph repeats the position and reasons already mentioned, while “I am saw this to my home example” does not clearly introduce the example. The grandmother paragraph also moves quickly between her business, experiences, opinions, and exercise habits. Use separate paragraphs for your position, reasons and example, and conclusion, with clear links showing how each point supports your view.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “opinions,” “experience,” “responsibility,” “confident,” and “exercise regularly.” These words help communicate the main ideas, and the example includes enough topic-related language to be understood. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear, such as “experiance,” “habbits,” “neccessory,” and “costomer.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “develop their habits in healthy” and “meeting to outstation.” Aim to learn accurate forms and natural collocations, such as “adopt healthy habits” and “meet customers while travelling for work.” More precise vocabulary for describing personal development would help you explain your ideas with greater clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a sentence linking experience to changing opinions. However, the range of structures is limited, and frequent errors in sentence formation and verb forms sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “People grow older they have many life experiance,” “She meet very people,” and “Today she 72.” There are also problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “she decide to at 40 a good habit change the mind and body also.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check past-tense forms when narrating your grandmother’s experience. Accurate simple sentences should come before adding more complex clauses.

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