Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, it is commnly seen that people are changing their views and habits as they grow.I am agree with this view. I will discuss my agreement in the following paragaraphs.

To begins with habits, now people are became work orintated and more disipline as they grow up. As a child or a youngesters they had having late night fun and exploring night life. But when they get a job or get married they adopt new habits like time managememt, work life balance to get a happy family and try to become a good husband or a wife or a parent. Moreover people are become a health consious. To elaborates, people are gaining more knowledge and now they diiferentiate between healthy and unhealthy food options so they choose healthy salad boul instesd of burger.

Not only habits people are changing their opinions as well they get older. when we are young or child our opinions are mainly family orianted and mostly we just copy others point of views. Being a child we easily influence by our surroundings. As we get older we gain more knowledge and got a job, we meet new people every day. Explore the other countiries and learn their culture and now we have a wider views and lot many things.

In conclusion, people are changing their habits and opinion as they get older and it is a good thing to have positive vision to get a better life and to become a person.I believe it is truly positive sign.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction (“I am agree with this view”) and remains consistent in the conclusion. You address both habits and opinions, giving relevant examples such as adopting time management after starting work or marrying, and choosing healthier food. These examples show a sound response to the question. However, the discussion of changing opinions is less fully developed: you say that people copy others when young and gain wider views through work, travel and meeting people, but do not explain a specific change in opinion or illustrate it with a concrete example. The conclusion also calls change positive without explaining why. To strengthen the response, extend each main idea with a clear cause-and-effect explanation and a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs on habits and opinions, and a conclusion. The progression from habits to opinions is logical, and signposts such as “To begins with,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the argument. This gives the essay a coherent overall arrangement. Some links are mechanical or unclear, however, and several sentences run ideas together—for example, the sentence beginning “As we get older we gain more knowledge” moves through work, meeting people, travel and culture without clear connections. The opening of the third paragraph also repeats the contrast rather than developing a smoother transition. Use fewer formulaic signposts and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “time management,” “work life balance,” “healthy and unhealthy food options,” and “wider views.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “health conscious” and “family oriented.” However, spelling errors and inaccurate word forms are noticeable throughout, including “commonly,” “discipline,” “differentiate,” and “countries,” while phrases such as “happy family” and “a wider views” are not well controlled. Some wording is also imprecise, particularly “people are became work orientated,” which makes the intended meaning harder to process. Build accuracy by checking spelling and choosing natural collocations, then use a few precise expressions to explain how experience changes people’s priorities and beliefs.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a contrast with “But when they get a job or get married” and a reason introduced by “so.” This shows some range, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction occur repeatedly: “I am agree,” “people are became,” “they had having,” and “we easily influence” need different grammatical forms. The sentence beginning “As we get older” also shifts between present and past forms (“gain,” “got,” “meet,” “Explore”) without a clear reason. These patterns sometimes make the reader pause. Practise accurate present and past forms, subject–verb agreement, and complete sentence structures before adding more complex clauses.

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