Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, this topic has increased significantly, Habbits and opinions its change regularly , this essay will discuss both views .

with regarding on changing their habits and opinions, many people believe that developing their ideas depends on their recent age, so they change their interesting often. for example, the things that you have interesting on it will change defiantly on the future because no one has the same things that he has an interest on it

on the other hand, a noticeable number of people believe that the same things and the same habits you have grown with it will continue with you untill the death ; therefor many people try to follow the conventional things that they known it. for instance, many old people prefer the same mood they are feel convenient with. furthermore, it depends on the person personality.

from my point of view, i believe that changing our habits and opinions its necessary foe every one because it helps us to discover new things and more exiting experiences .

to sum up, both perspectives have good confusable supporting ideas but in the end it belongs on the personality of the individual.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the topic and give a clear personal view in “I believe that changing our habits and opinions is necessary,” while also mentioning people who retain familiar habits. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the examples about interests changing and older people preferring familiar routines are broad, and the reasons behind them are not explained in detail. The response also falls 56 words short of the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop your position and support it with relevant examples. To strengthen the response, explain whether you agree overall, give specific examples, and show how age can influence habits or opinions rather than relying mainly on general statements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic essay shape, with an opening, two contrasting points, your own view, and a conclusion. Connectors such as “on the other hand,” “for example,” and “to sum up” help signal the intended relationships between ideas. However, progression is limited: the opening promises to “discuss both views,” but the paragraphs do not clearly develop a sequence of reasons and evidence, and the conclusion largely repeats that the issue depends on personality. Some linking is mechanical, and references such as “the same things and the same habits you have grown with it” are difficult to follow. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example directly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “conventional,” “personality,” and “experiences,” and the reader can generally identify your main ideas. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unclear choices make the message harder to understand. For example, “their interesting” appears to mean “their interests,” “same mood” does not clearly express the intended idea, and “good confusable supporting ideas” is difficult to interpret. Spelling errors such as “Habbits,” “untill,” and “therefor” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise vocabulary for discussing change and continuity, and check word forms, spelling, and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses, as in “because it helps us to discover new things,” and you use a range of sentence lengths. However, grammatical errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to interpret. Examples include “opinions its change regularly,” “many people believe that developing their ideas depends on their recent age,” and “the same habits you have grown with it will continue with you.” These show problems with subject–verb agreement, sentence construction, and clause formation. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly at sentence beginnings and around commas. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking that each clause has a clear subject and verb.

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