Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Habits and opinions of the peoples are formed during early age and sometimes they remain same throughout their life and for some people their habits and opinions change as they get older. People makes their habits and opinions on the basis of their understanding. Some people form habits by seeing someone or enjoying their company and some people form opinions as per their understaning level.

First and foremost, habits are something which are selected by the people from youngle age and they enjoy their habits during their life time. For example, many famous cricket sportsperson like Sachin Tendulkar and Mahandrasingh Dhoni have choose their habit as playing cricket since their childhood. Opinions are formed by experiances and as people have more and more experiance, their belive in opinions gets stronger day by day.

Secondly, it has been seen from the biography of famous celebrities and well-known writers and poets that they have choosed their habit in a learning years and decided to stuck with their habits in the low and high of the life, without thinking on it for the second time.

Inaddition to that, opinions are formed by different people by various experiances and they tend to happens the same way they thoght and ultimately they form their opinion in certain way that they seems fit and proper. Time changes but habits and opinions formed does not change even if people gets older.

Therefore, i am completely disagree witn the statement that It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a clear position in the conclusion: you disagree that people commonly change their habits and opinions as they age. However, the response addresses the question only partially because it mainly asserts that habits and opinions stay fixed, without explaining when or why this happens or considering the prompt’s claim in a developed way. The cricket examples illustrate long-term habits, but the discussion of opinions is mostly general and unsupported. The paragraph about celebrities and writers repeats the same point rather than adding a distinct reason. The response is also 7 words below the 250-word minimum; the 18 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each reason with a specific explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs, a further paragraph and a concluding statement. Sequencing phrases such as “First and foremost,” “Secondly,” and “Therefore” help signal movement between sections. However, the overall progression is limited because several paragraphs repeat the claim that habits and opinions do not change, rather than building separate supporting points. The relationship between ideas is sometimes unclear, particularly where the discussion shifts from habits to opinions within the same paragraph. Some linking phrases, including “Inaddition to that,” are also awkwardly handled. To improve, organise the essay around distinct reasons and use clear references to connect each example to the main argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “habits,” “opinions,” “experiances,” “biography,” and “celebrities,” and the reader can generally understand the intended meaning. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated frequently, especially “habits and opinions” and “formed.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “understaning,” “youngle age,” “belive,” and “thoght,” which reduce clarity and control. Some combinations are unnatural, for example “selected by the people from youngle age” and “in the low and high of the life.” Aim for more precise expressions and check spelling carefully; varied language for development, experience and long-term behaviour would make the argument clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the main position is usually understandable. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction. For example, “People makes” should use a plural verb, while “they have choose” and “they have choosed” show incorrect participle forms. In “habits and opinions formed does not change,” the subject and verb do not agree, and the sentence also needs a clearer grammatical structure. Several sentences join multiple ideas with “and” without clear punctuation, making them difficult to follow. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and past participles, then use a wider mix of controlled complex sentences to explain cause and example.

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