Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
There are many evidence are available where individuals change their opinions and perspective as they get aged. I firmly believe on this notion. People when come on their older age their thoughts and opine are become differe as compare to their teenage perspectives.
First of all many masses are changed their way of thinking according to situation. Such as there are many older people who did not in favour of leaving hometown in their teenage but when they get older and become parents they believe thta for sake for children bright future we should migrate other places where children get best education and medical facilities.
Furtheremore, there are ample of examples.some individuals like to spend time with their outsiders friends and do not care of their families in their young age but when they become in certain age they are changed their habbites for their parents sartifactions. Moreover, they get essential knowledge from their society family should be four first priority. Afterthat they have been getting experience that without family they are nothing. So for the sake of family they become responible and hardworker.
In conclusion, People are changed their habbits and attitudes when they get old. Positive attiduted can be enhance a society status. Older individuls should share their teenage mistakes and failuirs with their young families members which can provide them deep sense of awareness.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
Your position is clear: you agree that people’s opinions and habits change with age. You address both opinions and habits, and the examples about moving for children’s education and becoming more attentive to family are relevant. However, the first example is explained more fully than the second, and the conclusion introduces advice about older people sharing mistakes rather than developing your main argument. The response is also 23 words below the required minimum, so there is limited space to explain why these changes happen or to add a specific personal or real-world example. Develop each main point with a clearer explanation and supporting detail.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “First of all,” “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of your argument. The ideas are generally relevant, but connections within paragraphs are sometimes unclear. For example, the move from prioritising family to gaining knowledge from society is abrupt, and “Afterthat” does not clearly show how the next sentence follows. Some linking phrases also feel mechanical. Organise each body paragraph around one main idea, then explain and illustrate it in a clear sequence. Use pronouns and transitions only when their references and relationships are unmistakable.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You attempt vocabulary suited to the topic, including “perspective,” “migrate,” “facilities” and “priority,” and the reader can generally understand your intended meaning. However, the range is limited by repeated general terms such as “people,” “older” and “change,” while several word choices or collocations are inaccurate: “many evidence,” “believe on this notion” and “for sake for children bright future.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “habbites,” “responible” and “attiduted,” also make the writing less clear and controlled. Build a bank of natural phrases for discussing changing attitudes and responsibilities, and check spelling and collocations during revision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You try to use both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, as in the example beginning “Such as there are many older people…” and the sentence about spending time with friends. This shows an attempt at variety, but control is uneven. Errors in verb forms and sentence structure appear in phrases such as “People when come on their older age” and “they are changed their habbites”; agreement and article patterns are also problematic in “many evidence are available.” These errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Practise forming clear subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking tense, agreement and articles.
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