Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people say that individual has different ruetines and point of views when getting older. I agree with this statement as time possible changs these things. The reasons are mainly because of experiancing, situation and location.

Aged people have experianced more than younger one as they spend life time more. Food is one of great illustration. Older people are more concern about food such as seeking for rich nutrition meals are support long gravity. When they were young, food could be value for fabulous teast and social trends. Consequence of consumed excellent quality food makes them healty. This factor takes time to show the different.

Difference situations effect behavior. For example, the family always went aboard every summer to expore new countries. However, now they change to travel domestic because they are interrupted by money cricise. Once cash flow in house is rapidly decrease, then they change lifestyle as well.

Demography could make people adjust themself. People in tropical area who move to colder place like Europe reduce frequency of shower

per week. They might usually take a show 2 times per day. Once they migrant to cold weather, it decreses to 2 times a week.

Experiance of different types of food, financial situation and location od living can change people behaviors and opions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you agree that habits and opinions can change with age, and you give relevant examples involving food, family travel and moving to a colder climate. These examples show an attempt to explain how experience and circumstances influence behaviour. However, the discussion is brief and some explanations are unclear or only partly connected to getting older. For instance, the travel example mainly shows a response to financial difficulty, while the showering example concerns relocation rather than age itself. The conclusion repeats the main factors without developing your view further. The response also falls 36 words short of the required minimum, which limits the space available to explain and support your ideas. Develop each example and link it more explicitly to the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, three body paragraphs presenting different reasons, and a concluding sentence. This makes the main line of thought reasonably easy to follow. You also use signposting such as “For example” and “However” to show relationships between ideas. At times, though, progression within paragraphs is unclear. In the food paragraph, the shift from older people’s nutrition to the effects of food quality is difficult to follow, and “This factor” has an uncertain reference. The final paragraph largely repeats the introduction rather than drawing the examples together. Use clearer links between each example and your central claim, and make references such as “this” or “they” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “nutrition,” “financial situation,” “lifestyle” and “tropical area,” and you vary your examples rather than relying on one repeated idea. However, the range is limited and frequent spelling and word-choice problems sometimes make the meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “ruetines,” “experiancing,” “money cricise” and “location od living.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “long gravity” and “fabulous teast,” which obscure your intended meaning. Aim to learn common collocations as complete phrases and check spelling carefully. More precise wording for changes in diet, travel and daily routines would help you express the examples clearly and avoid repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and some attempts at more complex structures, including “as they spend life time more” and the conditional pattern beginning “Once cash flow in house…”. This shows an effort to explain causes and consequences. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement and articles often make sentences hard to follow. For example, “Older people are more concern about food” has an incorrect verb form, while “Once cash flow in house is rapidly decrease” combines forms inaccurately. The opening sentence also lacks an article before “individual.” Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and checking each clause for a clear subject and correctly formed verb. Shorter, controlled sentences would make your ideas easier to understand.

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