Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear,Sir

I am writing this letter to you regarding the current situation of countryside walkways which is also knowns as rural trails.Usually, i enjoy my daily running through this way. Brcause, the morning and evening view is really tremendeous here. Therefore,a lots of runners and hikers came here for activities.Thats why, i am freqeuntly noticing a garbage which is thrown by a people such as, water bottels and rappers.This is not only shameful for our civic sense but also very dangerous for nature as well public infrastructre because it can be stucked in severage during the rainfall.Therefore,rural council must be taken severe actions on this in order to mitigate the problem.If council intruduces fines as strict actions then it would be fruitful for all area.As well, they can aware the people through their compaingns or by the scoial media.I hope you will understand the circumstances and aware people on your level.

Your Sincerely,

Thanks

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you explain that you enjoy running on the rural trails for their morning and evening views, identify bottles and wrappers as litter, and propose fines and public-awareness campaigns. These ideas are relevant and the reader can understand your concern. However, some points are less fully developed than others. The location is described only generally as “countryside walkways,” and the consequences for nature and infrastructure are mentioned briefly rather than explained. Your suggestions would be more persuasive if you specified who should organise campaigns or how fines could be enforced. The letter’s purpose is clear, but a more precise description of your route and fuller support for the proposed actions would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The ideas follow a broadly sensible order: you introduce the issue, describe your walks and the litter, then suggest responses. Linking expressions such as “Therefore” and “As well” help show relationships between points. However, the letter is presented as one dense paragraph, so the shifts between your enjoyment of walking, the problem, and solutions are not easy to follow. Some connectors are repeated or used mechanically, and the relationship between sentences is occasionally unclear—for example, “Therefore, rural council must be taken severe actions” does not clearly express who should act. Use separate paragraphs for the three main points and choose simpler, more accurate links to create clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “rural trails,” “hikers,” “water bottles,” “fines,” and “social media,” and you attempt more specific language such as “civic sense” and “mitigate the problem.” This gives you enough range to communicate the main message. However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural combinations are noticeable, including “tremendeous,” “rappers,” “stucked,” and “aware the people.” These sometimes make the reader pause, even though the intended meaning is generally recoverable. Aim to check spelling carefully and learn common collocations as complete phrases, such as “raise public awareness” and “impose fines,” rather than translating expressions word by word.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a cause-and-effect explanation of how litter could affect drains during rainfall. However, the longer structures are often faulty, and errors in sentence boundaries, articles, agreement, and verb forms make the letter less controlled. For example, “a lots of runners and hikers came here” has problems with number and tense, while “rural council must be taken severe actions” does not form a correct sentence. The opening and closing also need accurate punctuation and conventional letter phrasing. Practise building complex sentences around a clear subject and verb, and check each sentence for agreement and complete structure. More accurate simple sentences would also improve clarity.

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