Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

I hope this letter finds you well ,I am writing this letter to describe my feelings about the way I walk near by my country side i make my enjoyment by creating my own happiness when I walk I loved the seceniorios and beauty of the surroindings appears to my eyes . all the young people and the old people come to maintain there health good

It is so bad to see the place we walk that it is litter and unhygenic by some of the people they have spitted very badly arouns the surroundings to maintain the dignity of our country we should think about the environment its our responsibilty to take care of our country walk neat and clean

to aviod this type of unhygenic things we should place some volunteers near the country side walk to watch each and every activity which the people are doing and make a board of instruction and place them on walls to aviod these iletrate things. I hope you will take a strict action against the things that are happening

your sincerly ,

hamza.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three points: you explain that you enjoy the countryside scenery and that people walk there for their health, describe the area as littered and unhygienic, and propose volunteers and instruction boards. However, the description of the litter is vague: “they have spitted” is the only specific example, and it is unclear whether you have seen other rubbish. The suggestions are relevant but need clearer explanation—for example, say what volunteers would do or what the signs should ask walkers to do. The purpose of writing to a newspaper is apparent, but the letter’s message and position are not consistently clear because several ideas are difficult to interpret. Develop the details more precisely to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall arrangement: it begins with your enjoyment of walking, moves to the problem, and ends with proposed action. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these points, and phrases such as “to avoid this type” signal a move to solutions. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the opening, where your personal enjoyment, the scenery, and other walkers’ health are joined without clear links. Some connections are also mechanical or unclear, such as “to maintain the dignity of our country” before the call to protect the environment. Use shorter, clearly focused paragraphs and connect each idea explicitly—for instance, explain how the litter affects the walks you enjoy.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “surroundings,” “environment,” “responsibility,” and “volunteers,” so the reader can identify the main subject. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “seceniorios,” “surroindings,” “iletrate things,” and “country side walk.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “make my enjoyment” and “maintain the dignity of our country” do not clearly convey your intended meaning. Choose familiar, accurate phrases for the countryside and the rubbish you have observed, and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would make your description and proposed actions clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a sentence beginning “to avoid this type…” that introduces a proposed solution. However, control is limited, and errors in sentence boundaries, verb forms, articles, and agreement frequently make the message harder to follow. For example, “I loved the seceniorios and beauty … appears to my eyes” shifts tense and does not form a clear grammatical sentence; “all the young people and the old people come to maintain there health good” also has problems with agreement and sentence construction. Punctuation is inconsistent, with long ideas joined together and spaces before commas. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas using clear conjunctions and correct verb forms.

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