Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to inform you about the litter problem in our colony. Sir, I am a fun loving person thats why I love to do walking in the evenings.

To fullfill this purpose I used to go to park daily. But from the past one week I noticed that some people litter the garbage openly on the street. From the health percpective it is very dangerous for the kids and old people as they can easily affected. Apart from that thi cause many serious illness.

So it is my suggestion to the municiple commitee that they should inforced some serious action towards this e.g a big amount of fine should be inforced for littering.

iI hope you understand my concern and give your best to remove this ignorance.

Thanking you,

Yours sincerely

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the main purpose by reporting litter, explaining that you walk in the evenings, and proposing fines. However, the response only partially fulfils the task: the countryside location is replaced by a park and street in your colony, and the litter itself is described only generally as “garbage” left openly. Your suggestion of a fine is relevant, but it would be stronger with practical details, such as placing bins or signs along the walking route. The letter is also 13 words below the required minimum, which limits how fully you can develop the points. Add specific details about where you walk, what litter you see, and how the community could respond.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable sequence: you introduce the concern, describe its effects, and then make a suggestion. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages, and linking phrases such as “Apart from that” and “So” show how the ideas relate. However, the progression is somewhat mechanical, with “Sir” repeated and the final request not clearly connected to a specific action. The opening also moves quickly from your enjoyment of walking to the litter problem, without clearly identifying the countryside route. Use a more purposeful paragraph structure and connect each point with clear references—for example, explain how the litter affects the park you visit before presenting your proposed solutions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the central concern, with relevant terms such as “litter problem,” “health,” “fine,” and “kids and old people.” However, the range is limited, and several inaccurate or unnatural choices make the letter less precise. “Do walking” is not a natural expression, while “litter the garbage openly” is repetitive and unclear. There are also spelling errors, including “fullfill,” “percpective,” and “municiple,” which reduce accuracy. Try to use more specific language for the rubbish and the location, such as food wrappers or plastic bottles along a countryside path. A wider set of accurate, natural expressions would make your complaint more effective and appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures, including “as they can easily affected,” to explain the health risk. However, the range is limited, and errors in verb forms, sentence construction, and punctuation are frequent enough to make parts of the letter awkward. For example, “they can easily affected” needs a passive form (“can easily be affected”), and “Apart from that thi cause” lacks a clear, correctly formed subject and verb. “I used to go to park daily” also has problems with the article and tense in this context. Practise building accurate sentences with modal verbs and passive forms, and check articles and punctuation before submitting. Clearer sentence patterns will help your ideas read smoothly.

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