Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear madam,

I am writing this letter to bring public's attention towards a serious issue of waste left behind in a beautiful park.

It is my morning routine to go to millenial park to get some fresh air. I love to walk there because it feel very refresh and its very peaceful.This park has a scenic view of rocky mountains. Sometimes i do yoga and meditation there. Usually i do running around the playing area.

From few days i am noticing that people throw garbage on tha pathway rather that using bins which are also in park. I saw some wrappers of candies and icecream, empty cans moreover there are few takeout paperbags from some restaurants.

This is very sad that people are not using appropriate ways to dispose of the trash. It is a moral responsibility of individuals to maintain park neat and clean. I would like to request to the park's management team to take some strict action on the people who left their mess around the park.

yours faithfully,

Amandeep.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three points: you explain that you walk in Millennial Park for fresh air and peace, describe wrappers, cans and takeaway bags, and suggest action by park management. These details make the letter relevant and give the reader a clear sense of the problem. However, the enjoyment of walking is developed more fully than the proposed solutions. Asking management to take “strict action” is quite general, and the letter does not explain what action might be effective or how it could prevent littering. The opening also refers to a “beautiful park” without clearly identifying the countryside setting mentioned in the task. Develop the practical suggestions—for example, more bins, signs or regular checks—to make this response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: purpose, reasons for walking, examples of litter, and a request for action. The paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “From few days” and “This is very sad” signal the shift to the problem and its consequences. This coherent arrangement is a strength. Some connections are less smooth, however: the list of litter items is joined with “moreover” without clear punctuation, and the final paragraph moves from individual responsibility to a request for management action without explaining the link. Use clearer transitions and reference words, and organise the proposed solutions separately from the general comment about responsibility, to make progression more natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary to describe the setting and the issue, including “scenic view,” “pathway,” “wrappers,” “empty cans” and “dispose of the trash.” This gives the letter enough topic-specific language to communicate its main points. However, several choices or forms are noticeably inaccurate or unnatural, such as “bring public's attention towards,” “get some fresh air,” and “takeout paperbags.” “Strict action” is also vague for a formal request. These issues limit precision and sometimes make the phrasing less natural, although the intended meaning is generally understandable. Aim for more conventional collocations and accurate word forms, such as “draw the public’s attention to,” “takeaway bags,” and “enforce measures against littering.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use mostly straightforward sentence patterns and attempt some longer structures, for example, “I love to walk there because it feel very refresh and its very peaceful.” The message remains understandable, but errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries are evident. Examples include “it feel” instead of “it feels,” “people throw” where the present continuous would fit the recent trend, and “the park's management team” after a request that needs a more complete grammatical construction. Several sentences also run together, as in “peaceful.This park,” and capitalisation of “I” is inconsistent. Practise checking subject–verb agreement, tense choice and punctuation, while adding accurate complex sentences to broaden the range.

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