Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you find this letter in good health. I go for a walk at Family Park located near the Trunk Road. The park has a very comfortable envoirment. Old green trees in the park gives very refreshing look to the park. Flowers planted along the pavement also gives a soothing effect to eyes. The most important reason that I enjoy my walk at park is; it has a separate pathway for a walk and play area for children and families, which keep the envoirment more calm.

Although the managment of park is very active in cleaning and keeping the park up to the mark all the time but recently I have noticed a litter in the park along the walk way and around benches. Being responsible citizens it's our duty to help the management in keeping the envoirment healthy and clean. we should throw the litter in dustbins placed at different corners of the park.

Your news paper can help us to spread an awareness message to community on benefits of keeping the envoirment clean and our basic responsibilities towards this matter. Even after discussing with the authorities of the park fine can also be implemented.

Kindly consider my request. I will be waiting for your response.

Yours sincerely,

Ashley.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you explain why you enjoy Family Park, describe litter near the walkway and benches, and suggest public awareness, using bins, and possible fines. The description of the park is relevant and gives the reader a clear sense of its appeal. The problem itself, however, is described only generally as “a litter”; examples of what you have seen would make this part more specific. Your suggestions are also not equally developed: the awareness message and fines are mentioned, but you could explain who should organise them and how they might reduce litter. The letter’s purpose is clear, though the opening “Dear Sir” does not follow the requested “Dear Sir or Madam.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: it introduces the park and your reasons for walking, moves to the litter problem, and then offers solutions. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and linking expressions such as “Although” and “Even after” show an attempt to connect ideas. Some connections are not fully clear, however. “Even after discussing with the authorities” does not clearly explain how the discussion relates to implementing a fine, and the long opening paragraph combines several descriptions and reasons. The transition from the litter problem to citizens’ responsibilities also shifts attention away from describing what you have observed. Clearer sequencing and more precise links between each proposed action would make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for the topic, including “pathway,” “pavement,” “soothing effect,” “dustbins,” and “authorities.” These choices help communicate the setting and possible responses. However, several spelling and word-choice problems are noticeable, including “envoirment,” “managment,” and “news paper.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise: “a very comfortable environment” and “keeping the park up to the mark” do not express your meaning as naturally as “a pleasant setting” and “maintaining the park.” “A litter” is not the usual expression for rubbish in this context. More accurate spelling and natural collocations would make your vocabulary more effective and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “which keep the environment more calm” and a concessive opening with “Although.” The main ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “Old green trees … gives” and “Flowers … gives” need plural verb agreement; “which keep” also needs to agree with its reference. Articles and sentence construction need attention in “at park” and “Although … but recently,” where “although” should not be paired with “but” in this structure. Capitalisation after a full stop is also inconsistent in “we should.” Review agreement, articles, and clause linking to improve accuracy while retaining your attempts at complex sentences.

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