Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I would like to express my concern regarding the garbage thrown by people in the park which is outside my village.

Firstly, I want to share that I love walking in the morning because it help me to start my day energetic as well as maintain my health. I usually go daily on the Riverside park which is near my village, because of the wind flowing on the river in the morning with my friends.

Unfortunately, from the last 3 weeks there are some pupil which are throwing garbage near the river side. Most of them are young generation who throw cans and fast food garbage after doing parties as well as there some home owners who throw there waste on the parks.

Lastly, I think govenment should introduce some fines for these people who produce litter on these places to save the ecosystem and install bins for the garbage so that people can use it.

I would therefore appreciate if you could take appropriate action.

Yours Faithfully,

Jass

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points and maintain a suitable, concerned tone for a letter to a local newspaper. You explain that walking in the morning helps your health and describe the riverside park near your village. You also give relevant examples of litter, including cans and food waste, and suggest fines and more bins. These details make the response purposeful. However, some points are less fully developed: the description of litter is brief, and the proposed measures would be stronger if you explained how fines could be enforced or who should provide and maintain the bins. The opening and closing are appropriate, but a clearer call for the newspaper to raise public awareness would make the purpose more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: it introduces the concern, explains your enjoyment of walking, describes the litter, and proposes solutions. Paragraphing helps distinguish these main points, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Unfortunately,” and “Lastly” guide the reader. The progression is generally easy to follow, although the linking can feel mechanical because several paragraphs begin with explicit sequencing words. Some connections within sentences are also unclear, particularly in the description of the litter and the people responsible. For example, the shift from young people to homeowners could be linked more smoothly. Use a wider range of natural transitions and clearer references so that each idea connects without relying so heavily on formulaic markers.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “concern,” “fines,” and “ecosystem,” and the reader can understand the types of litter and the suggested response. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision. Phrases such as “garbage thrown,” “some pupil,” “fast food garbage,” and “home owners” do not express the ideas naturally in this context. There are also spelling errors, including “govenment,” and repeated use of “garbage” makes the description less varied. Aim to use more precise terms for litter and those responsible, and check spelling and common word partnerships. This would make the letter sound more fluent and appropriate for a newspaper.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a reason clause with “because” and a purpose clause beginning “so that.” The overall meaning is usually clear, but some errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction reduce accuracy. For example, “it help me” needs subject–verb agreement, while “there are some pupil which are throwing” has problems with number and the relative clause. The sentence beginning “I usually go daily” is also awkwardly constructed, and the final request needs an article in “appreciate if you could.” Work on producing accurate basic sentence patterns first, then extend them with subordinate clauses. Careful proofreading for agreement and sentence boundaries would improve control.

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