Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

dear sir,

to spend time countryside areas provide fresh environment with cleaniness .however, i saw some walkers throw their garbage around the walking area. i want your attention on this problem and i have some suggestion to solve this problem.

greenry of countryside areas attract every individual. i am the one from them, i used to walk every morning near to my home because consumption of fresh air helps to reduce stress and anxiety.in addition, it is very healthy and beneficial habit to relax body and metal health.some of my friends and me met there and share beautiful nature.

however, i noticed some people throw there garbage around the walking area. which contains- cans, lays packets and empty bottels, which leads to affect enivornment.

i want you to provide more garbage bins in every public areas. if someone do it again then have to pay some amount money to community. hope you understand my problem and comes with solution as soon as possible.

yours sincerely,

jaskaran singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you explain that you walk near your home for fresh air and to reduce stress, identify litter such as cans, snack packets and bottles, and suggest adding bins and fining repeat offenders. These details make the letter relevant and give the reader a clear sense of your concern. However, some parts are less fully developed than others. The reasons for enjoying the countryside are listed, but could be explained more clearly, and the proposed fine is not accompanied by details about who would enforce it or how. The opening also asks for attention without clearly stating that you are writing to raise a growing local problem. A more explicit purpose and a little more support for the solutions would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: it introduces the concern, gives reasons for enjoying walks, describes the litter, and ends with proposed solutions. Paragraph breaks help separate these functions, and words such as “however” and “in addition” signal relationships between ideas. At times, though, the links are mechanical or unclear. For example, “however” appears at the start of both the opening and the litter paragraph, while “which contains” is left as a fragment and its reference is uncertain. The transition from enjoying nature to describing litter could also be smoother. Use clear topic sentences and connect each suggestion directly to the problem it addresses; this would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main message, including “countryside,” “fresh air,” “stress and anxiety,” “garbage bins,” and “environment.” There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “beautiful nature.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: “cleaniness,” “greenry,” “bottels,” and “enivornment” are examples. Some combinations are also unnatural, including “consumption of fresh air” and “pay some amount money.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than more elaborate phrasing. Proofreading spelling and learning common expressions for litter and public spaces would improve clarity and make your vocabulary more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a reason clause in “because consumption of fresh air helps to reduce stress” and a conditional suggestion beginning “if someone…”. The main message is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. For example, “i noticed some people throw” needs consistent tense, and “if someone do it again then have to pay” lacks correct subject–verb agreement and a clear subject in the second clause. There are also sentence-boundary problems, such as “Which contains…” following a full stop, and punctuation is often missing after sentence openings. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and complete conditional sentences, while checking capitalisation and punctuation.

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