Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

I am Kamal Singh.I currently live in baltana society. I am witing this letter to draw your attention about the trash which I had noticed while walking along the side of road near safari park.

This Park is just steps away from my home. I usually go every evening for walk and to do some physical activity. This park had trail where every age member walk and comes with their family,its one of the hot destination near my area.

As, it,s a long trail of 2 km, but from few days I am noticing the vistor comes with their family enjoy here and after that just left the trash (garbage) into the site . As its diificult for the management to clean every day this park.

I am writing this letter , so you can write one column into the newspaper about this park current situation and also about the fine to be paid when some one left litter at park .

Hoping for your considerstion.

yours faithfully,

kamal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three required points: you explain that the park is close to home and that you walk there for exercise, describe visitors leaving rubbish, and ask the newspaper to raise the issue and mention fines. These ideas are relevant and the reader can understand your purpose. However, some points are less fully developed than others. The litter description is general—“the trash (garbage)”—and would be clearer with examples such as bottles, food wrappers, or bags. The proposed response could also be more specific about how the newspaper or park management might help, for example by publicising rules or adding bins. A clearer explanation of why the countryside walk matters to you would strengthen the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The information is arranged in a generally sensible order: you introduce the concern, describe your connection to the park, explain the litter problem, and make a request. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages, and the purpose of the letter remains understandable. Some links between ideas are awkward or unclear, however. For instance, “As, it,s a long trail of 2 km, but…” combines contrasting structures, while “As its difficult for the management…” does not clearly connect to the preceding point. The final request also moves quickly from the problem to fines. Use straightforward transitions such as “Recently,” “As a result,” and “I would therefore suggest” to make the progression smoother and the relationships between ideas clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main issue, including “trail,” “physical activity,” “management,” and “fine.” There are also attempts to describe the park as a popular place. However, the range is limited and several choices or spellings make the letter less natural, such as “hot destination,” “left the trash into the site,” and “current situation.” Some words are repeated, particularly “park” and “trash,” and the parenthetical “trash (garbage)” does not add much precision. Choose more exact terms for the rubbish and use natural collocations. For example, visitors may “leave litter along the trail,” and the newspaper could report on the “growing litter problem.” Proofreading spelling would also improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The letter includes both simple statements and attempts at longer sentences, such as the sentence beginning “As, it,s a long trail of 2 km.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but some complex constructions are not controlled, and errors occur in sentence boundaries, verb forms, articles, and punctuation. For example, “I usually go every evening for walk” needs an article, while “visitors … enjoy here and after that just left” shifts tense and lacks a clear grammatical structure. The opening also runs sentences together: “I am Kamal Singh.I currently live…” Aim for a reliable mix of accurate simple sentences and carefully formed complex ones. Check tense consistency, sentence boundaries, and punctuation before submitting.

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