Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to bring to your attention of some issues I encountered while walking in St. Mary Park. I love coming to this park as it is near my house and helps me unwind my mind. Moreover, it is soothing to eyes, with the grass, fountain and flowers but I think in recent months there is a lot of littering around the park. Without any second doubt, I it is not good for the beauty of the park, and for the walkers as well, because there are syringes near the bushes, packed food waste and many more stuff. I have some suggestions which can be implemented; such as hiring securtiy guards, some notice boards and keeping more dustbins. However, only these measures will not stop the littering, perhaps we can also educate our fellow walkers to be more responsible by some notice boards. I firmly believe it can play a vital role and give us significant results.

Thanking You

Yours Truly

Rohit Bhardwaj

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three points and maintains a clear, relevant purpose: you explain that the park is close to home and helps you unwind, describe syringes and food packaging, and propose guards, signs and more bins. These details make the complaint specific and the suggestions practical. The description of the litter is stronger than the explanation of why you enjoy walking, which is brief, and the proposals could be developed by explaining how signs or education would change walkers’ behaviour. The closing also communicates your confidence that action could help. Overall, the task is covered clearly, though some ideas are more fully supported than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The information follows a sensible order: you introduce the concern, describe the park and litter, then offer solutions and close the letter. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “However,” and “perhaps” help show relationships between ideas. However, most of the content is placed in one long paragraph, so the shifts from your enjoyment of the park to the litter and then to solutions are not clearly signposted. Some connections are also repetitive: notice boards are suggested twice, and “However” does not clearly contrast with the preceding point. Use separate paragraphs for the purpose and setting, the problem, and proposed action, and make each transition express a distinct relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a local complaint, including “unwind,” “syringes,” “dustbins,” and “educate,” which helps convey both the setting and the problem. Some choices are imprecise or unnatural, such as “unwind my mind,” “soothing to eyes,” and “many more stuff”; these reduce the naturalness of the letter even though the meaning is generally clear. There is also a spelling error in “securtiy.” Aim for more accurate collocations and specific descriptions—for example, identify the food waste as discarded wrappers or packaging. Avoid vague phrases such as “some issues” when you can name the concern directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response includes a mix of simple and more complex forms, including a reason clause (“as it is near my house”), a contrast introduced by “but,” and a conditional suggestion (“if” is implied in the proposed measures). Most sentences remain understandable, but some grammatical errors are noticeable. For example, “I am writing this letter to bring to your attention of” has an incorrect construction, and “Without any second doubt, I it is not good” contains a broken sentence structure. The phrase “there is a lot of littering” also does not fit the intended meaning as naturally as a construction describing litter being left. Check sentence boundaries and read each clause aloud to catch missing or duplicated words.

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