Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my disappointment to other walkers in the countryside who just left their litters from not noticeable to getting more and more noticeable.

This park is small area but I have walked here to enjoy the green nature. It has been enjoying to circle around the park to see those street animals peacefully relaxing.

However, I have been seeing more and more litters left by the other walkers, such as bottled water and packs of energy bar. Those litters are affecting the park, especially those street animals that tempt to eat those litter, that might cause of their death.

I would like you to spread this information to solve the ongoing problems left by the other walkers. I would suggest to bring a small bag with them. Therefore, they can put their litters in it and bring it through their home. Additionally, we can raise funds for the local park to implement adding trash bin around the area.

Thank you and I hope that you can help to raise awareness of this.

Yours sincerely,

Angelo Sta. Ana

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you explain that you enjoy the park’s greenery and watching animals, identify discarded water bottles and energy-bar packets, and suggest both carrying a bag and adding bins. The concern that animals may eat the rubbish gives the problem a relevant consequence, and the letter’s purpose is clear. Some details, however, are less fully developed: the location is described only as “this park,” and the proposed awareness campaign and fundraising are not explained in practical terms. The opening also focuses on expressing disappointment rather than clearly presenting the issue to newspaper readers. To strengthen the response, specify what makes the walking route enjoyable and explain how the newspaper or local community could help implement your suggestions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: it introduces the concern, describes the park and litter, then offers solutions and closes politely. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and connectors such as “However,” “Therefore,” and “Additionally” make the sequence easy to follow. Some cohesion is less controlled, though. “This park” has no earlier location reference, and “those litters” is repeated without a clear or natural reference. The transition from asking the newspaper to spread information to proposing bags and fundraising could also be more explicit. Use clearer links between the problem and each action—for example, explain that the newspaper could publish a notice encouraging walkers to take their rubbish home.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the main points, including “countryside,” “energy bar,” “trash bin,” and “raise awareness.” There are also attempts at more specific description, such as “green nature” and animals “peacefully relaxing.” However, several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “litters” is generally uncountable in this meaning, “street animals” does not fit animals in a countryside park, and “tempt to eat” does not express the intended risk. “It has been enjoying” is also an incorrect word form. Aim for natural combinations such as “litter left behind,” “wildlife,” and “may be tempted to eat it.” This would make your message clearer and more idiomatic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including a relative clause in “animals that tempt to eat those litter” and a result clause beginning “Therefore.” The overall meaning remains understandable, but errors in verb forms, sentence construction, and articles sometimes make the reader pause. For example, “It has been enjoying to circle around the park” needs a different subject and verb pattern, while “This park is small area” is missing an article. In “I would suggest to bring,” the verb pattern is also incorrect; use “I would suggest bringing” or “I would suggest that walkers bring.” Practise these patterns and check that each sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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