Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am one of the residents who utilise the park in the countryside near my home in Desa Park City. I usually love to do a brisk walk every morning as the park has many pebbles which is built to ciculate the blood flow and good for health benefits.

Recently, I noticed that some part of the park has so much trash. This is flowing from the bin itself, especially near the barbecue pit, which happens to be utilised during the weekends for party purposes. I feel the bin does not have enough capacity to hold a large amount of rubbish, which attracts flies and causes a foul smell, and the impact is not good for the park users.

I suggest that the council should provide a large-sized rubbish bin. I suggest that the council should also come up with much stricter rules; for example, people who throw rubbish or litter should face a large fine and penalty. In this case, they will be more alert not to litter, and the cleanliness of the park will be well preserved.

Sincerely

aruvi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you explain that you walk in Desa Park City for health, describe overflowing rubbish near the barbecue area, and recommend larger bins and fines. The problem is made concrete through the mention of flies and a foul smell, and your suggestions are relevant. The explanation of why you enjoy walking is less fully developed: the reference to pebbles and blood flow is difficult to understand, so the reader does not get a clear picture of what makes the setting enjoyable. The proposed rules could also be explained more specifically, such as how they would be communicated or enforced. The letter is appropriately directed to a newspaper, but a clearer account of the countryside setting and a little more support for the ideas would strengthen it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: it introduces your walks, describes the litter problem, and then offers solutions. Paragraphing supports this progression, and linking expressions such as “Recently” and “In this case” help show how the ideas relate. The cause-and-effect detail about the overflowing bin attracting flies and producing a smell is also easy to follow. However, the repeated opening “I suggest that the council” makes the final paragraph somewhat mechanical, and the connection between the park’s pebbles and your enjoyment is not immediately clear. You could improve flow by combining the recommendations and using more varied transitions, while making references between sentences more explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “rubbish,” “barbecue pit,” “capacity,” “foul smell,” and “large fine,” so the main message is understandable. There are also attempts at more formal wording, such as “utilise” and “preserved.” However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise, which limits clarity and flexibility. “Pebbles which is built to ciculate the blood flow” is difficult to interpret, while “for party purposes” and “large-sized rubbish bin” sound awkward in this context. “Utilise” is also unnecessarily formal when “use” would be more natural. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling, particularly “circulate”; this would make your vocabulary more precise without requiring more complicated words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex forms, including the relative clause “which attracts flies and causes a foul smell” and the conditional structure “people who throw rubbish or litter should face a large fine.” Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, and errors do not generally prevent understanding. Some grammatical problems remain, however. In “the park has many pebbles which is built,” the relative clause has an unclear reference and “is” does not agree with the plural “pebbles.” The phrase “I usually love to do a brisk walk” also has an awkward verb pattern, and “some part of the park has so much trash” needs a clearer plural or singular construction. Review agreement, articles, and verb patterns, and proofread punctuation and spacing.

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