Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to inform you that garbage is scattered on the road.

I am doing a job in the IT sector, so my job is very hectic, and I usually do walk to relieve my stress. There is green tress and side grass on the road . which feel me pleasant .

On the other hand,yesterday when i walekd cross the street i saw some raps of choclates and packets of chips , some cigretts.which destroys the view of the streets .

I am requesting to you through this letter it would be clean by hiring some cleaning staff . so we can take breathe in neat and clean environment. I look forward to hear about you soon.

Thanking you

jaspreet kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the three main points: you explain that walking helps relieve work-related stress, mention the greenery beside the road, identify litter such as chocolate wrappers and chip packets, and propose hiring cleaning staff. These details make the letter relevant, but the reasons for enjoying walking and the location are only briefly described, and the proposed solution is not developed—for example, you could suggest bins, signs, or regular clean-ups. The opening focuses on informing the newspaper that rubbish is present, rather than clearly presenting the issue as a request for public attention. The response also falls 21 words short of the required minimum, which limits the opportunity to explain your ideas fully. Add specific details and a clear request to readers or local authorities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence: it introduces the concern, explains your walking routine, describes what you saw, and ends with a suggestion. Paragraph breaks help separate these points. However, progression is not always smooth: “On the other hand” does not express a clear contrast between the previous paragraph and the litter description, and the opening sentence does not lead naturally into why you walk. Some links are mechanical or unclear, while the final request and sign-off feel abrupt. Use straightforward transitions such as “Recently” or “To address this problem,” and connect each paragraph more explicitly to the letter’s purpose. A fuller closing that asks the newspaper to raise awareness would also give the letter a clearer ending.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the basic issue, including “relieve my stress,” “packets of chips,” and “cleaning staff.” However, the range is limited, and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts less easy to read, such as “tress,” “raps,” “choclates,” and “cigretts.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “side grass” and “take breathe in neat and clean environment” do not convey the intended meaning smoothly. Aim for accurate, natural phrases such as “green trees and grassy verges,” “litter spoils the scenery,” and “breathe clean air.” Proofreading spelling and choosing more precise collocations would make the letter clearer and more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and joined sentence forms, for example, “I am doing a job in the IT sector, so my job is very hectic,” but the range is limited and errors occur frequently. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are often faulty: “There is green tress and side grass on the road . which feel me pleasant” is not a complete, correctly connected sentence. There are also problems with verb forms and agreement, as in “which feel me pleasant,” and with articles and sentence construction in “it would be clean by hiring some cleaning staff.” The closing phrase “I look forward to hear” also needs a gerund after “to.” Practise building accurate sentences with clear subjects and verbs, then check punctuation and verb patterns.

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