Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir Or Madam,

I am writing to express my concern about increasing amount of litter left by walkers in the park.

There is a large park at Hudson Ave, which has walking trails and chilren's play area. I enjoy walking at the park there as it offers peaceful enviroment, freash air and beautiful scenery.

Lately, it is observed that plenty of garbage is left behind by the visitors. The food wrappers are found near playzone and trails. Additionally, pet waste is not collected by their walkers and left behind openly in the walking path and on grass.

I would like the community to install more garbage bins at several spots in the park. Also, inform pet owners to collect their pet poop and discard according to waste rules. The state has a lfine of $150 in green zone, and our park falls under it. Therefore, a security to observe violations of cleanliness.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three required points and maintains a clear, appropriate concern about litter. You explain why you enjoy the park—its peaceful environment, fresh air and scenery—and identify specific problems, including food wrappers near the play area and trails and uncollected pet waste. Your proposed actions, adding bins and reminding owners to clean up, are relevant; referring to the stated fine also gives the suggestion some support. To strengthen the response further, develop how the newspaper or community could communicate these rules, and clarify the final proposal about security, which currently reads as an incomplete idea. Overall, the task is covered clearly, though some suggestions are less fully explained than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information follows a sensible sequence: you introduce the concern, describe the park and litter, then suggest solutions. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and linking expressions such as “Additionally,” “Also,” and “Therefore” make the relationships between points visible. This provides a coherent overall arrangement. However, the final sentence, “Therefore, a security to observe violations of cleanliness,” does not complete the idea, so the connection between the fine and enforcement is difficult to follow. Some transitions also feel mechanical rather than smoothly integrated. To improve, use complete sentences and make references explicit—for example, state who should monitor the park and how this would support the proposed rules.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the topic, including relevant terms such as “walking trails,” “food wrappers,” “pet waste,” and “violations.” The descriptions of the park and litter are generally understandable. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “chilren's,” “enviroment,” “freash,” and “lfine.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “pet poop” is informal for a letter to a newspaper, while “discard according to waste rules” is awkward. “A security” does not clearly express the intended role. Aim for accurate spelling and more natural collocations, such as “hire a security guard” or “appoint an attendant,” and use a consistently formal register.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple sentences and some more developed structures, including the relative clause “which has walking trails and children's play area” and the reason clause “as it offers…”. Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors and incomplete constructions persist. For example, “increasing amount of litter” needs an article (“an increasing amount”), and “a peaceful environment” needs an article. In “pet waste is not collected by their walkers and left behind,” the structure is not parallel; “owners do not collect their pets’ waste and leave it…” would be clearer. The final sentence is a fragment rather than a complete clause. Practise articles, parallel sentence structures, and complete sentences while retaining your attempts at complex forms.

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