Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir

My name is NavjotSingh and i m a common man in the society. Moreover, i have a good walking habit and i go in the park the which is located near my home. The best part the park is sidewalk .

In addition, a few days ago, i have been seen some individuals throw trash in the garden. For example, papers and rapers. These kind of rubish go one place to another because of wind.

Furthermore , the park has lots of amenties like canalas, swings and sitting area for old peoples which every one can enjoy but due to waste it create irritatipn and leads to smell. Although, its has bin but nobody put there . so please writr some board. Hence, i write this letter to you so you can publish my suggestions which can remit this issue.

Thanks

Navjot

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the main situation and include all three requested points: you say you walk in a park near your home, mention litter such as paper and wrappers, and suggest putting up a sign. However, the reasons you enjoy walking are only briefly indicated, and the proposed action is not explained or developed. The letter also does not clearly ask the newspaper to publish an appeal or explain how signs might help. The response is 144 words, below the required 150-word minimum, so it is slightly under-length as well as limited in development. To strengthen the response, add specific details about what you enjoy on the walks and give practical, clearly explained suggestions, such as more bins or a public reminder.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The ideas are presented in a generally understandable order: you introduce your walking, describe the litter, and then offer a suggestion. Linking expressions such as “In addition” and “Furthermore” help signal movement between points. However, the letter is written as one continuous block, so the stages of the message are not clearly separated. Some links are also mechanical or do not show the relationship accurately; for example, “Although” does not fit the point about the park’s amenities and litter. The sequence around “so please writr some board” and “Hence, i write this letter” is difficult to follow. Use separate paragraphs for the purpose, problem, and request, and connect each idea more directly.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “park,” “trash,” “wind,” “swings,” and “sitting area,” so the reader can identify the setting and problem. However, the range is basic and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the message difficult to understand, such as “rapers,” “rubish,” “amenties,” and “irritatipn.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “a good walking habit” and “writr some board.” Aim for accurate, natural expressions suited to a letter to a newspaper, such as “I regularly walk” and “put up signs asking visitors to use the bins.” Proofreading spelling and choosing precise words would make your ideas clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses, for example, “because of wind” and “which every one can enjoy,” but sentence structures are very limited and errors occur frequently. Examples include “i have been seen” instead of a correct past-tense form, “the park the which is located,” and “These kind of rubish go.” There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries in “Although, its has bin but nobody put there.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. Practise forming accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. For example: “A few days ago, I saw people throwing rubbish in the garden. The wind then carried it around the park.”

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