Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. I am really disappointed that there is a lot of litter left on the walking paths.

I am nature loving person and I love to walking in near of public park which is located in my community. When I walk there then I see there are huge amount of garbage thrown on the walking area which is destrory the beauty of park.

Also, individuals throw the things not only the walking paths but also on the grass , in the playing area which is not good habit is increase the number of diseases.

I think the community host should take strict action toward this issues. There should be installed the cameras and keep the garbage bin with the labelling, and give the responsibiliy to citizens to keep neat and clean surroundings.

I hope hear from you soon with the valid solutions.

Your faithfully,

NAvjeet .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you explain that you enjoy walking in a nearby public park, describe litter on paths, grass and the playing area, and suggest cameras, labelled bins and asking residents to keep the area clean. The purpose of writing to the newspaper is clear, and the concern about the park’s appearance and health is relevant. However, some points are less fully developed than others. The reason you enjoy walking is only briefly stated, and the proposed actions would be more convincing if you explained who should install the cameras or how the newspaper could help raise awareness. A more specific description of the litter would also make the complaint more informative. Overall, the letter covers the task, but some ideas need clearer explanation and support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable structure, moving from the problem to your experience and then to possible solutions. Paragraph breaks help separate these stages, and linking expressions such as “Also” and “I think” make the progression understandable. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “When I walk there then I see” combines two linking words awkwardly, while “which is not good habit is increase the number of diseases” makes the relationship between litter and illness difficult to follow. The opening also repeats the general complaint before explaining your own experience. Use clearer transitions and make each paragraph develop one main point; this would make the overall progression smoother and the references easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main concern, including “litter,” “walking paths,” “grass,” “cameras” and “garbage bin.” There are also attempts to express more specific ideas, such as the litter “destrory[ing] the beauty of park.” However, noticeable word-choice, collocation and spelling problems sometimes make the message less natural or precise. Phrases such as “nature loving person,” “walking in near of public park” and “community host” are not idiomatic, and “responsibiliy” and “destrory” are misspelled. Build a more reliable range of phrases for describing the setting and proposing action, and check spelling and word forms. This will help your ideas sound clearer and more appropriate for a formal letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, for example, “I am really disappointed…” and the sentence beginning “When I walk there…”. The main message is generally recoverable, but errors in sentence structure, verb forms, articles and agreement occur across the letter. Examples include “I love to walking,” “there are huge amount,” and “which is not good habit is increase.” The final request, “I hope hear from you soon,” also needs a verb form after “hope.” These errors make some sentences difficult to read, particularly when several ideas are joined together. Practise building accurate basic clauses first, then connect them with one clear subordinate clause at a time. Check articles and subject–verb agreement when editing.

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