Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

Hope everything is running fine in the media industrie, and in present time newpaper is like the lamp in dark night which can show the path to others. Same way today i like to share a news which needs spotlight in my area. so i am a individual living in hamilton street of your town and everday i uesd to walk in Aengaline park at evening as the park is beautiful and young children use to come daily to play i like them watching by waking.

But since some days i was observing that there is dog pop in waling area which is very awful, and dont know who was littering their in publick place. its my humbel request that authority take a neccesary steps againts them like puting some bords like no litter or give fine of $50 so they can collect their own belonging with them. hope i will heard back from you.

your sincerely,

Patel Maharshi.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three bullet points: you explain that you walk in Aengaline Park in the evening because it is beautiful and children play there, identify dog waste in the walking area, and propose signs and a fine. These details make the letter relevant, but the reasons for enjoying the walks are only briefly explained, and the litter description is limited to one type. The request to the newspaper is also not fully clear: the opening says you want to share news, but you do not directly ask the paper to publish an appeal or report. Develop the impact of the litter and make a specific request to readers or local authorities to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter follows a broadly sensible order, moving from your connection to the newspaper and your walks to the litter problem and possible solutions. The contrast introduced by “But since some days” helps signal the change in topic, and the closing gives the letter an ending. However, most of the response is placed in one long paragraph, so the main points are not clearly separated. Some links are also awkward or unclear, such as “Same way today i like to share a news,” and the final request and sign-off feel abrupt. Use separate paragraphs for the walking context, the problem, and your suggestions, with straightforward transitions to make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some expressive language, including “like the lamp in dark night” and “needs spotlight,” and use relevant terms such as “walking area,” “public place,” and “fine.” However, vocabulary control is limited by frequent spelling errors and unnatural word combinations, including “media industrie,” “dog pop,” and “collect their own belonging.” These choices can make the reader pause or infer your meaning. Aim for accurate, natural phrases rather than elaborate imagery: for example, “litter in the park” and “take their rubbish home.” Check spelling carefully and choose words that precisely describe the problem and the action you want the newspaper or authorities to take.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, such as the sentence beginning “as the park is beautiful,” but control is inconsistent and the range of sentence structures is limited. Errors in verb forms and tense appear in “i was observing” and “i will heard back,” while sentence boundaries and punctuation are often unclear, especially in the long opening. There are also problems with articles and sentence construction, as in “i am a individual” and “hope everything is running fine.” These errors sometimes make the message difficult to follow. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using clear punctuation and consistent tense.

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