Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir,

Subject - Peoples are throwing garbage in park which is very bad.

sir , i am going for walking daily in park which near my home , many peoples who are stying around me they all are go for walking there daily,from very long time notice and seeing there peoples letting so many which is very bad , this garbage reunion the air quality and beauty of park , so many childrens are playing there and peoples are also doing yoga there , there so many beautiful trees and flowers park is looking very beautiful, but this garbage reunion my mood , i am suggesting this to you please arrange dustbins in park so people can throw garbage in dustbin ,and hire a caretaker person who stop peoples to throw garbage in park , so peoples can enjoy walking there .its also responsibility of people's who are going there place a notice board there throw garbage in distbin.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the three main points: you explain that you walk daily in the park near your home, describe the effect of litter on the park, and suggest bins, a caretaker and a notice board. These are relevant ideas, and the reader can understand your concern. However, the description of the litter itself is vague: you refer to “garbage” but do not give examples of what you have seen. The reasons you enjoy walking are also only partly developed, although you mention the trees, flowers and people using the park. To make the letter more complete, specify the kinds of rubbish and explain more clearly what makes the walks enjoyable. A more suitable opening and a clear closing would also strengthen the letter format.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a broadly understandable order: it introduces the park, explains the problem and then offers solutions. This gives the reader a basic sense of progression. However, nearly all the information is placed in one long paragraph, and several ideas run together, as in “there so many beautiful trees and flowers park is looking very beautiful, but this garbage…” The repeated use of “so” and “and” does not clearly show how points relate, while references such as “there” are sometimes unclear. Separate the letter into short paragraphs for the enjoyment and location, the litter, and proposed actions. Use a few precise links such as “In addition” or “As a result,” and punctuate sentence boundaries so the progression is easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “park,” “walking,” “dustbins,” “air quality,” and “notice board,” so the main concern is generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make the message difficult to interpret. For example, “garbage reunion the air quality” appears to mean that litter harms air quality, and “peoples are stying” is not an accurate expression. Repeating “garbage,” “people” and “park” also limits variety. Choose more precise terms for the rubbish you observe, such as “plastic bottles” or “food wrappers,” and use natural collocations such as “install litter bins” and “keep the park clean.” Check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect several ideas in longer sentences, but sentence structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make the relationships between ideas hard to follow. For instance, “i am going for walking daily in park which near my home” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “many peoples who are stying around me they all are go” combines clauses without correct agreement or verb forms. Articles, plurals, punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent. Try building accurate simple sentences first: “I walk in the park near my home every day.” Then add a controlled complex sentence, such as “Although the park is beautiful, litter is spoiling it.” Use full stops to separate complete ideas and check subject–verb agreement and tense.

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