Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope you are doing well and stay healthy. My name is Parkash Singh. I lives near Caledan. Everyday I goes to early morning walk with my friends on countryside trail and love's to do walking to make my body fits and also I breath fresh air.

Yesterday I saw alot of litter and garbage thrown by other walkers on the trail and also few part of trail where walkers can not walk. Which also attracts alot of insects and animals which increases more health problems.

With the help of you newspaper I would like to aware those who did this and people of our soceity comes forward for helping to clean this litter and garbage. Local authorities should implement some rules and fine there so walkers could not throw litter that place. I will thank you to understand the situation.

Your faithfully

Parkash Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three points: you explain that you walk with friends for exercise and fresh air, describe litter on the trail, and suggest public awareness and fines. However, the ideas are only partly developed. The location is given as “near Caledan” and “on countryside trail,” but you could describe the area more clearly. The litter is mentioned generally as “litter and garbage,” with little detail about what you actually saw; the claim that it blocks parts of the trail could be explained further. Your proposed actions are relevant, though it is unclear who would organise the clean-up. The letter is also one word below the required minimum. Add specific examples and explain how your suggestions could work.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence: an opening about your walks, a paragraph describing the problem, and a final paragraph proposing action. This makes the main message easy to follow, and links such as “Yesterday” and “With the help of” help signal progression. To make the organisation more effective, separate the greeting and introduction from the description and recommendations more clearly, and use paragraphing consistently. Some connections between ideas are unclear, especially “Which also attracts…” and the shift from asking the newspaper to raise awareness to asking the community to clean up. Use clearer sentence links and specify who each pronoun refers to. The closing is appropriate in purpose, but the sign-off should follow standard letter conventions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the topic, including “countryside,” “trail,” “litter,” “insects,” and “authorities.” There are also relevant attempts to express the effects of the problem, such as “attracts… insects and animals” and “health problems.” However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which makes parts of the letter less natural: “make my body fits,” “aware those who did this,” and “fine there” are examples. Spelling errors such as “alot” and “soceity” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise phrases for the types and locations of rubbish, and check spelling and collocations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, for example the sentence beginning “Yesterday I saw…” and the clause about litter attracting insects. However, control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the message difficult to read. Examples include “I lives” and “I goes,” where the verb does not agree with the subject, and “I breath fresh air,” where the verb form is incorrect. “Which also attracts…” is an incomplete sentence, while “I will thank you to understand the situation” has an unclear grammatical construction. Work on subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and forming complete sentences. Using a few accurate complex sentences, rather than joining several ideas loosely, would improve clarity.

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