Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers.

Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter

• say why you enjoy walking and where

• describe the litter you have seen on your walks

• suggest what might be done about the problem

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to draw your attention to our countryside as the litter has been increasing day-to-day.

I am Shraddha Kapadia. I live in the Huron village area. Yesterday, after having a dinner, I went out to get some fresh air. I was having a peaceful walk in the park. Weather was pleasant and fregrance of flowers made my mood cheerful. So, I really enjoyed my walk.

One thing disturbs me a lot is the litter. Despite having bins for the garbages, most of the litter was on the floor. Mainly, water bottles and napking. Apart from this, some garbage bins were over-flowing and fruitflies around them too.

I think we as a citizen need to take care of this issue. If we will not take appropriate steps then it could be harmful for us. To overcome this problem, the government should ban plastic bottles. In addition, there should be someone who could change all the garbages three times a day. Last but not least, individuals should have to take responsibility of their litter.

I am hoping to hear from you.

Thank you.

Yours sincerely,

Shraddha Kapadia

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three required points: you explain that you enjoy peaceful walks in the park, describe bottles, napkins, overflowing bins and flies, and propose several responses. Your purpose is clear from the opening, and the suggestions about public responsibility and more frequent bin collection are relevant. The ideas are generally extended with details, such as the pleasant weather and flowers, although the location is not fully consistent: you mention living in Huron village but do not clearly identify where you usually walk. Some proposals, particularly banning plastic bottles, would benefit from a brief explanation of how this would reduce the litter. Overall, the task is covered clearly, with a few ideas that could be more precisely supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: purpose, enjoyment of walking, the litter problem, and possible solutions. Separate paragraphs help the reader follow these stages, and connectors such as “Despite,” “In addition,” and “Last but not least” make relationships between ideas visible. This is a coherent arrangement, though some linking is mechanical, especially the repeated list-style transitions in the final paragraph. The shift from describing one walk yesterday to discussing a growing problem could also be made smoother by explicitly saying that the litter is a recurring sight. The closing is understandable, but “Thank you” followed by “Yours sincerely” feels slightly abrupt for a newspaper letter. More natural transitions and clearer links between examples and proposals would strengthen cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the topic, including “overflowing,” “appropriate steps,” and “take responsibility,” and the descriptions of bottles, bins and fruit flies are relevant. However, several noticeable spelling, word-form and collocation problems limit precision: “fregrance,” “napking,” “garbages,” and “fruitflies” are inaccurate, while “change all the garbages” does not express the intended action naturally. “Day-to-day” is also not the most suitable phrase for describing an increasing trend. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding the main message, but they make the letter less natural and occasionally require interpretation. Check spelling and learn common combinations such as “collect the rubbish” and “empty the bins.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

There is a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional sentence (“If we will not take appropriate steps then it could be harmful for us”) and a concessive opening (“Despite having bins…”). The main message remains clear, but some grammatical errors occur. For example, “I am Shraddha Kapadia” is unnecessary in this context, “Weather was pleasant” needs an article, and “we as a citizen” has a number-agreement problem. The conditional would be more accurate as “If we do not take appropriate steps, this could be harmful to us,” and “individuals should have to take responsibility” combines modal forms awkwardly. Continue practising articles, agreement and conditional patterns while retaining your attempts at complex sentences.

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