Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The international sports specially football world cup and championship are done worldwide at least once every year . Many people believe that is a good way for communication between different cultures and countries as people spend nice time within matches and cermonies are held for the winners .While ,Others have another point of view as that leads to create competition and invey between spectacors and the players themselves .

on one hand , for the people who adopte that olympics and international sports events have merits to increase the friendship between countries as well as the communications . as it leads players from different countries to meet together attending the launch and final ceremonies .the fans of certain famous player as for example MESSI which is one of legends in that game . People are coming from different area in the world to encourage him and his country . the team players are chakehands at the begenning of the match and the winner get gold medal while others can get silver or bronze ones .so it has merits for the communication between people and fans for famous players as well .

on the other hand , People who contradict the previous point of views as championchips and Olympics have its own drawbacks . They think that competetion between the players create competetion extends from the match to be generally and officially in politics especially if the refree has some bias for one team.there is no doubt that in the history some of problems happened in matches between the football players themselves and some injuries were repoted based on violance in the match but it was temporary and limited to the game time only .

In conlcuison , it seems that Olympics and international sports have pros and cons.in my opinion that olympics are important to communicate countries together rather than creat competetions . it is recomended to increase the spirit of sports which away from any violance and organisations as FIFA adopt to spread

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and give a clear preference in the conclusion: international sports can connect countries and should be encouraged over competition. The examples of players meeting at ceremonies, fans travelling to support Messi, and medals being awarded are relevant to the friendship argument. You also mention political tension and injuries as possible drawbacks. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the link between sporting competition and political conflict is asserted rather than explained, and the examples do not show clearly how events build lasting relationships between countries. The conclusion introduces a recommendation about promoting sportsmanship, but the final point about FIFA is unfinished. Develop each side with a clearer explanation and a specific, fully explained example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Phrases such as “on one hand,” “on the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the first body paragraph moves from ceremonies to Messi and then medals without clearly connecting each example to the main claim. Some linking is mechanical or unclear, as in “as it leads players…” and “People who contradict the previous point of views.” Referencing is also sometimes difficult to follow. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main idea, then explain and connect each example to it; ensure the conclusion completes its final thought.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “international sports events,” “competition,” “ceremonies,” “bias,” and “injuries,” so the reader can identify the subject and main arguments. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to read, such as “invey,” “spectacors,” “chakehands,” and “violance.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “increase the friendship” and “competition extends from the match to be generally and officially in politics.” Aim for accurate collocations and more precise terms, such as “foster friendship,” “spectators,” and “sportsmanship.” Proofreading spelling and choosing familiar, natural expressions will improve clarity more than attempting complex vocabulary inaccurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “as” and “especially if,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, complex constructions are often faulty, and errors in sentence boundaries, articles, agreement, and verb patterns can make the reader work to understand the point. For example, “Many people believe that is a good way” lacks a clear subject after “that,” while “the winner get gold medal” has agreement and article problems. Several sentences run together after full stops, and punctuation spacing is inconsistent. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, articles, and punctuation. Shorter, controlled sentences would help make your ideas clearer.

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