Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is often argued that to strengthen the relationship between countries across the world olympic and football have a significant role.But there are some groups who oppose this kind of games.
In my opinion I totally agree that this kind of games are a good way to bring countries together. The main reason is people gather together in one place to watch and participate in match. consquently, this opportunity opens door for tourism.People from different countries share their culture and met new people.this has a significant contribution for the development of ones country.
Moreover,people can relax and unwind from their daily routine stress.after attending such match ,we came to work with full energy so,this inturns the productivity in work place.
on the flip side this olympic and football sports might cause some chaos in groups who are crazy fan of it.forinstance in our village, a 17-year-old boy were killed in DSTV room during manchester united and Arsenal football.
To sum up it is good to engage in some matches but there has to be a balance not to be unhealthy competitor.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You state a clear opinion that international sports can bring countries together, and you give relevant reasons, including tourism, cultural exchange and relaxation. You also acknowledge the opposing view through the example of a fatal clash between football fans. However, the discussion of competition between countries is only minimally developed: the example concerns violence among local supporters, rather than how international events may create rivalry between nations. The conclusion calls for balance but does not explain how this addresses the two views. The response is 173 words, so it is 77 words below the required minimum; the eight words copied from the prompt are not counted. Develop both sides with specific explanation and examples to address the task more fully.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, reasons supporting your view, a contrasting point and a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “Moreover,” “on the flip side” and “To sum up” help signal these stages. However, progression within the body is limited, and some connections are unclear. For example, the claim that attending a match improves workplace productivity is introduced without explaining how it relates to bringing countries together. The paragraph about fan violence also shifts from international competition to a local incident without a clear bridge. Improve cohesion by grouping each view into a developed paragraph and using references and transitions that make the relationship between each example and the main argument explicit.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “tourism,” “culture,” “productivity” and “competitor,” and phrases such as “relax and unwind” help communicate your ideas. The range is sufficient to express a basic position, but several choices are imprecise or unnatural, which limits clarity: “this kind of games,” “opens door for tourism” and “unhealthy competitor” do not express the intended meanings accurately. There are also spelling and word-form slips, such as “consquently” and “inturns.” Aim for more precise collocations and check spelling carefully. For instance, describe events as “international sporting competitions” and explain that they can “foster cultural exchange” or “intensify national rivalries.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt some longer sentences and use basic structures to express reasons and contrast, but the range is limited and errors recur in agreement, verb forms, articles and punctuation. Examples include “this kind of games are,” “a 17-year-old boy were killed” and “we came to work,” where the forms do not fit the intended meaning. Several sentences also run together, as in “People from different countries share their culture and met new people.this has…”; this makes the relationships between clauses harder to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled complex forms with “because,” “while” and “although.” Check subject–verb agreement, tense consistency, sentence boundaries and capitalisation during proofreading.
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