Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In this current era, all people love sports either it is international or national. Some individuals argue that International sports such as The Olympics and Football World Cup may help to bring different nations together while other people oppose this view that it creates competitions between them.
To begin with, the main reason is people share culture while participating to watch international sports at various countries. Therefore, they may know more deeply about nations. As a result, they may respect eachother roots. To elaborate, The olympics will be hosted by India in 2028 so international tourists will come to India for participating this event. During that time India will represent their culture. Hence, people will may know about Indian culture from ground level. As a consequence, individuals may respect eachother nations. For Example, one well known artical from a newspaper revels that international sports can hold good bonds among different nations.
However, other individuals think that international sports may spoil relationship between separate nations by measuring strength of country's team players. As a result, there may chance of conflicts among countries. To explain, people only bellive that those countries have good coach and money may get good strength for game and may try to win game which turned into conflicts among viewers.
To conclude, many people belive that international sports like The Olympics or Football World Cup may bring nations togther as a sharing culture while oppose this view as a measuring strength;however, i support former view.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You address both views and state your preference for the view that international events bring nations together, so the response is relevant to the question. The first body paragraph gives a reason—cultural exchange—and an example involving visitors to India. However, the example is not clearly explained, and the claim that the Olympics will be hosted by India in 2028 is inaccurate. The opposing view is mentioned, but the link between competition and conflict among viewers is brief and unclear. Your conclusion repeats the two positions rather than adding a clear final justification. The response also falls three words short of the required minimum. Develop each view with a more accurate, specific example and explain how it supports your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This makes the discussion easy to follow at a basic level. You also use signposting such as “To begin with,” “However,” and “To conclude” to show the direction of the argument. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, with repeated links such as “As a result” and “As a consequence.” Some references are unclear: “they” in the first body paragraph could refer to tourists or nations, and “this event” follows a claim that is difficult to follow. The final sentence also joins contrasting ideas awkwardly. Use fewer formulaic transitions and connect each example directly to the point it illustrates.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “international sports,” “culture,” “nations,” “competition,” and “conflicts,” which helps communicate the main ideas. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “represent their culture” and “respect each other’s roots.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning less clear: “share culture while participating to watch,” “good bonds,” and “measuring strength” do not express the intended ideas naturally. Spelling errors such as “artical,” “revels,” “bellive,” and “togther” are noticeable. Build a more precise range for discussing cultural exchange, sporting rivalry, and international relations, and check spelling and collocations carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “those countries … may get good strength for game and may try to win.” The main message is generally understandable, but errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms are frequent enough to affect clarity. For example, “either it is international or national” has an incorrect clause structure, while “there may chance of conflicts” is missing a verb form. In “people share culture while participating to watch,” the relationship between the actions is not grammatically clear. There are also issues with articles, agreement, and punctuation, including “The olympics” and the run-on construction after “strength;however.” Practise accurate clause patterns and review articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.
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