Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

I certainly agree that international sports events brings countries together. In this event candidates from different countries were able to show their culture in a form on how they dress up, their body gestures and their fighting spirits and norms. It is easy for us to identify candidates from Arab country by just looking at their clothes specially for ladies they use to wear Hijabs. Another is that whenever announcer's calls the participants through their body gesture you know werre they came from just like Chinese, South Korean and Japan who use to bow their heads al the time. And the very recent that cought actually my attention is that there is one Football World Cup where Japanese people who supperted their teams left their area in the arena clean without any littering.

With all the differences mentioned it is wonderful to know that they might be once oponent in each and every match but they were able to show sportmanship if it happens that they're not able to win. A lots of new friendship is being stablish regardless of language barriers and through respect. I do believe that most atleats has develop discipline and it is easy for them to create a healthy competetion. Through social media we ae able to witness each other countries support to one another through their post.

Although, due to pressure and we can say attitude of some candidates we cannot say a hundred percent that every competetion is healthy it will all fall to the attitude of the candidates and we all know that there our countries which has a low temper than other. This is the usually cause of stress and bullying specially in the social media that draws hatred from each countries.

In conclusion, candidates hould have proper dicipline whether they win or loss respect is the best key to connect to other countries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that international sports can bring countries together, and you support it with relevant examples, such as athletes showing cultural customs and Japanese supporters cleaning the stadium. You also acknowledge the opposing view by describing pressure, bullying on social media, and hostility between countries. However, the discussion is uneven: the positive view receives several examples, while the claim that events create competition rather than friendship is only briefly explained. Some points, such as athletes’ discipline and friendship across language barriers, are asserted rather than developed with a clear explanation or example. To strengthen the response, explain more directly how rivalry can increase national tension, then weigh that against the benefits before stating your position firmly in the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: the opening paragraphs present benefits, the third introduces drawbacks, and the final paragraph concludes. This gives the reader an overall route through your ideas. You also use linking expressions such as “With all the differences mentioned” and “Although.” However, some connections are unclear or mechanical. For example, “Although, due to pressure…” does not form a complete contrast smoothly, and “Another is that whenever…” makes the relationship between examples difficult to follow. References such as “they” and “this” are sometimes vague, so readers may need to infer whether you mean athletes, supporters, or countries. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “language barriers,” “sportmanship,” “healthy competition,” and “bullying,” and the examples show an effort to describe cultural differences precisely. However, the range is uneven, and noticeable spelling and word-choice errors sometimes make the message harder to understand. Examples include “oponent,” “supperted,” “competetion,” and “dicipline”; “candidates” is also not the natural term for athletes or participants in this context. Some phrases are awkward, such as “show their culture in a form on how they dress up” and “a low temper.” Build accuracy by learning common collocations for sport and international relations, and check spelling and word forms carefully. This will make your ideas clearer without requiring more complicated vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a relative clause in “Japanese people who supported their teams…” and a contrast introduced by “Although.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “events brings” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “A lots of new friendship is being stablish” contains problems with number and verb form. The sentence beginning “Although, due to pressure…” is also incomplete or poorly joined to the following clause. Practise building accurate sentences around one main idea, then add subordinate clauses only when their relationship is clear. Check agreement and verb forms during revision.

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