Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Sports keep us fit healthy and active. Sport events such as Olympics or the football world cup are a good way to meet different countries together . It is often argued that many people believe that international sports are create competition, not a friendship, between countries. In the light of my personal opinion this is the best way to meet up with the other countries. As per as events, like sports and different events and festival.

Firstly, many people argued that these events create competition not a friendship, between countries, When person exchange with other they feel confidence and friendship , They exchange hug and discuss the factor why they feel angry. Sport is an activity and fungame, when two or more person play each other , finally one person get lead and win . So this is just a game not race.

Secondly,Those people who say that international sports events ,The Olympics or football world cup are a good way to bring countries together, When they play as a competition , they play like a war and try to defeat with each other.As per as when we having a cricket match between India and Pakistan its like a big war international war. All people want to watch this match , so they are free and have leave for watching this match .It is a big competition .

To sumup with this , some things are going to friendship and some are going to competition . It is to big difference between , If we want a good relationship we having organise some events celeberate together such as special day like friendship day .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a personal view that sports can help countries meet, and you refer to both friendship and competition, including the India–Pakistan cricket match. However, the discussion is only partially developed: the first body paragraph mainly asserts that sport is “just a game,” while the second describes the match as “like a big war” without explaining how this supports the opposing view. Your position is also difficult to follow because you first call events the best way to meet countries, then conclude that some lead to friendship and others to competition, before recommending friendship-day events. Develop each side with a clear reason and a relevant example, and state your own balanced or definite position consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “Firstly” and “Secondly,” and a concluding sentence, so there is an attempt to organise the discussion. However, the progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the opening moves from health to international events and then to an unfinished reference to festivals, while the first body paragraph shifts from exchanging greetings to how a game is won. Linking phrases such as “As per as” do not clearly show the relationship between ideas, and the conclusion does not follow smoothly from the examples. Use one paragraph for each view, connect each example directly to its point, and use clear references and transitions rather than relying mainly on sequence markers.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “international sports events,” “competition,” “friendship,” and “defeat,” which helps identify the subject. However, the range is basic and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate or repetitive, sometimes making the intended meaning hard to understand. For example, “meet different countries together” and “exchange with other” are unclear, while “fungame” and “factor why they feel angry” do not express the ideas precisely. There are also spelling and form errors such as “celeberate.” Build a more precise set of phrases for describing international relations and sporting events, and check collocations and spelling so your ideas are easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, for example, “When two or more person play each other, finally one person get lead and win.” However, the range of structures is limited, and frequent errors in sentence formation, agreement, articles, and verb forms make several sentences difficult to read. Examples include “international sports are create competition,” “When person exchange with other they feel confidence,” and “we having organise some events.” Punctuation is also inconsistent, with run-on sentences and spaces before commas or full stops. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then join related ideas with correctly formed clauses; check singular and plural nouns, articles, and verb forms when editing.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.