Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this cutting edge era,playing sports in other nations is beneficial for making strong bonds with them,however others consider that it build more compitions between countries ranther than making friendship between international level.So, I give my both point of views in upcoming paragraphs.

On the one hand side, install international olympics and world cup in other countries bring countries together because these games give an ocations to players to take a part in other countries,Due to this,cnative countries can see how other countries are playing and after the compition they also meet again to see their skills.For instance, in FIFA world cup a lot of countries play in other countries but build the strong bonds in other country people.Moreover, they can also learn moral and ethic values of other countries when they meet with other individuals.

on the other hand,in an internation level games build more competition between nations because when they play games in other countries they their mindsets are not only play games in other nations,tjhey make their mind to achieve cup in their competition.Furthermore, in most of the tournaments people are judging their skill because some games are playing in different ways in forgien countries due to which people loose their hopes.For instances, last year in asian games native individual losse their competition because they do not have more skills as the other countries because of this they want to make more skilld in their games and take a part in future at an international level.

In my opinion, Although some people think international sports make more competitions betwen other countries,these games make true bonds and give an ocations to players and countries to represent their intlectual skills in front of other countries and make true bond between them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views: the first body paragraph argues that events help people meet and learn from one another, while the second explains that countries also compete to win. Your final paragraph gives a preference for the friendship view, so the response covers the main parts of the prompt. However, the position is not fully clear in the introduction (“I give my both point of views”), and the supporting ideas remain limited or unclear. For example, the FIFA example says countries “build the strong bonds” but does not explain how this happens, while the Asian Games example mainly describes losing and wanting to improve skills rather than showing how competition damages friendship. State your opinion directly and develop each example with a clearer link to the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a concluding opinion. The signposts “On the one hand” and “on the other hand” help readers follow the contrast, and “Moreover” and “Furthermore” introduce additional points. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because ideas are joined in long, loosely connected sentences. In the first body paragraph, the sequence from players participating abroad to local people observing them and then meeting them is not expressed clearly. Some links are also mechanical or unclear, such as “Due to this” and “because of this.” Use shorter sentences where needed, and make the relationship between each example and its main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “international level,” “competition,” “moral and ethic values,” and “represent their … skills.” These choices show an effort to discuss both cultural exchange and sporting rivalry. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “oc ations,” “compitions,” “forgien,” and “make their mind to achieve cup.” Some phrases are also imprecise: “install international olympics” does not clearly express hosting or holding an event, and “true bonds” is repeated without further precision. Build a bank of accurate topic collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast clause beginning “Although” and explanations introduced by “because” and “when.” This gives the response some structural variety. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries can make meaning difficult to follow. For example, “these games … bring countries together” is followed by “these games give an ocations,” while “international level games build” lacks a clear grammatical construction. The sentence beginning “when they play games … they their mindsets” also contains a missing verb, and several sentences run together after commas. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and separating complete sentences with full stops; then add subordinate clauses only when their structure is secure.

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