Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this modern era , many nations give more importance to Olympic games such as Football world cup as well as they believe that this brings opportunity to bring nations together to make good relationship with them while on the other hand some group of people believe that these events create more competition between the nations rather than making good relationship between countries. This essay will discuss both parties view and in the end i will give my own point of view with my personal experiences.

First of all, Olympic or the Football world cup it is happening each year and each year many countries are taking part in it such as India, South Africa, Canada, New Zealand, Australia and up to many more they all are playing against each other that definitely brings a though competition let me be more clear with example, In the last year of Football world cup the Spain played against Argentina when Spain won the world cup it becomes shame part for Argentina people because they have such a though player which is impossible to beat them but some how Spain won it , Which created big controversies and complications between both countries.

In my second paragraph, I would like to mention the good relations which can be happen with these sort of games but only if they do not feel any grudges with each other let me core and insist with an example, every year cricket match is happening between India and Pakistan every citizen in the country knows that they both are enemies with each other but if the players play the games with each other with respectfully and honestly there will be not fights .

In the end, I would like to mention that there are no demerits of playing Olympics and Foot ball for the world cup in the end it all depends on the government of the nations as well as mindset of the people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited. The examples provided, such as the mention of Spain and Argentina or the India-Pakistan cricket matches, are somewhat superficial and lack depth in explaining how these events specifically foster friendship or conflict. The position is clear, but the arguments are not fully extended. The essay also contains factual inaccuracies, such as stating that the Olympics occur every year, which impacts the quality of the response. To improve, you should provide more detailed analysis and ensure your supporting examples are accurate and logically connected to your main points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between and within them is often mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'let me' or 'in the end'. The transitions between sentences are occasionally abrupt, making the progression of ideas feel disjointed. For example, the jump from the introduction to the first body paragraph lacks a smooth logical bridge. While the paragraphing is present, the internal structure of the paragraphs needs more sophisticated linking words and better referencing to improve the overall readability and logical flow of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is adequate for basic communication but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. There is a reliance on simple, repetitive phrasing such as 'good relationship', 'many nations', and 'every year'. Some word choices are awkward or incorrect, such as 'shame part' instead of 'a source of shame' or 'though competition' instead of 'tough competition'. There are also issues with collocation, such as 'no demerits of playing'. To improve, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary and idiomatic expressions, and pay closer attention to word choice to ensure your meaning is conveyed accurately and naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Olympic or the Football world cup it is happening'), incorrect verb tenses, and punctuation errors. The sentence structure is often repetitive, and there are several run-on sentences that lack proper punctuation. For instance, 'let me core and insist with an example' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, improving punctuation, and reducing the frequency of errors in complex structures.

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